so deep

a wandering thought

I steeled myself to tell you

all of it,

twice.

I can’t;

I don’t know why.

I am into you

so deep I

drown inside

my thoughts

and wonder

how to come up

for air

and then I have to return

to my real life

the one without you

the tenuous tether

of a cell phone

between us

until

we meet again.

 

Reviews

[MsJewel]

Oh...this just pulls at the heartstrings...
Beautiful writing my friend.

:) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

Your writing is so romantic, I am pleased this has this effect.:)

[Aethereal]

Great flow from top to bottom! Those fetters; those tenuous cell phone tethers don't mean as much as a touch. We have all become silk worms dangling on threads in sundry places trying to piece together electronic traces of familiar faces.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes this is true. Thank you.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is sad Kit Kat. Distance is a cold hearted b***h yes?

[Lyn Anderson]

I never really saw it as sad when I wrote it, but I guess it is.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes it is .

[Ruth]

This deeply shook me...not easy - and one would think voicing things would be when we do feel this way but it isn't x

[Lyn Anderson]

YOU and me, we have some similar pieces, I know you feel it.

[Ruth]

We do hon, and I do :) x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"then i have to return/ to my real life/ the one without you"

that is so sad...much that can't really be said from a distance, over a phone...
but if it runs "so deep"

it will survive the gaps..

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. I am so pleased to read your words, always.:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

One thing I know is truly knows no boundaries, that includes time, distance or death… a truly sentimental write.

[Lyn Anderson]

Funny how we go to write something small, and the feeling oozes out of it anyway ...

[Madalyn Beck]

Romantic piece here! I love the desire here and the not wanting to come back to reality once they leave your bubble. I also love the part about the cellphone because that is so true now-a-days. It made me think about how we are so tied to them for one reason (or person) or another. Great write! xo (:

[Lyn Anderson]

Why thank you, sweetie, I enjoy this review.

[Coyote Poetry]

A built-up of powerful emotion in the poem. I like the way you ended the poem. The cellphone and waiting for the next meeting. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks, I am honoured by your visit.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is my honor. I'm getting slow. I'm writing three books, working and babysitting. Always a pleasure to read your words.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

AGAIN... perfect expression

"I am into you
so deep i
drown inside
my thoughts
and wonder
how to come up
for air"

Those lines right there say it so perfectly...this entire wondering thought is brilliantly done. Loved this.

[Lyn Anderson]

You are too kind. I do so appreciate it.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Naw.. you are too good... that is all there is to it.

[Sami Khalil]

"I steeled myself to tell you
all of it,
twice.
I can’t;
I don’t know why.
I am into you
so deep I"

One of your best romantic pieces of poetry. Excellent...:)........................

[Lyn Anderson]

thank you so much Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)....................