over the moon

for letterhead, whose writing inspires me, and correspondence made me think

once upon
a time
in the land
of real ...

we began
at the end,
and are
working

our way
to the start.

you said
before and
are somehow
expecting

some interloper
to arrive
and sweep
me away
from you.

but let me
tell you baby,
prince charming
is a toad,

and being
over the moon
is highly
over rated.

I ran out
of oxygen
last time
I was up
there.

my idea of
happy ever after
is one in which
I share,
not lose,
my heart.

Author's Note

happy ever after is intentional. I like it that way.:)

Reviews

[Cassie]

Full of lessons, prince charming is a toad...mmmhhh!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Lyn. Love should have a happy ending. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the proper ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much. I liked coming back to this one

[V]

Interesting and entertaining take on the topic. Many good lines in here, I enjoyed reading though I feel the first stanza reads a tad off, somehow. I seems to me, it differs from the others regarding use of words and flow. Other than that, well done and enjoyable as so often :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Ah yes, a glitch in conversion from phone to tablet, you are right, just needs a shuffle.

[V]

It reads awesome now, smooth and flowing. Stanzas 6-8 my abs favs :) I like the words "but let me tell you baby,...". I don't even know why, it just reads so well. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks for the help -- I saw it as soon as you pointed it out.

[V]

You're welcome. :)

[R.M.C]

A great write. Using Fairy-tales (with the famous first line and the mention of prince charming as a toad) has worked extremely well here, especially as you disagree with the 'love' depicted in most fairy-tales and countered it with your own version of what love really is - sharing your heart, not simply giving it up. Simply superb. And I wholeheartedly agree with you; true love is sharing your life with someone who feels the exact same way about you and who offers their heart as you offer yours...

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much, this is one of my recent favourites, I do appreciate.

[highonwords]

hi kl -

the beginning lines have an ingenious twist - starting at the end - having hindsight over love - which made me sad - because it sounds like the relationship has been doomed to end from the beginning - i like the word 'interloper', your way of introducing a third character to 'our tale' - let's call him the 'Marlboro Man' on his horse - prince charming, usually doesn't come as a prince with all that trappings - but more as a regular guy from around the corner - you are right - love takes hard work, not always relying on the capriciousness of feelings - you couldn't breathe anymore, because perfection simply doesn't exist in relationships, and you lose the parts that add up to who you really are

i appreciate this gesture, so much - love the brainstorming with you - i'm glad you wrote this poem - thank you, always, KL

my best to you,
steph

[Lyn Anderson]

Ah hon, it isn't sad at all -- it's all in how you interpret ends and beginnings -- sometimes you get to know someone personally after you get to know someone intimately -- it doesn't mean it's doomed -- just means it didn't start by pretending to be something we're not and getting to know all our faults last.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes, that is what real love is....not giving away our hearts...but sharing them as one...

love this write...the toads, the loss of oxygen...so many dream too big...when they could realize such comfortable dreams that might last.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you very much. I appreciate it.

[Érenn]

This is such a well penned write. Lovely to say in the least. Now how many would write something about being happy with how their love life is like this? I wanted to choose my favourite lines here, but guess what I like all of them. The first verse and the last verse are too good. Yeah definitely understandable how letterhead would have inspired you. She is an awesome writer ^^

[Lyn Anderson]

Well thanks, I appreciate that.