My heart for your smile

my attempt at a modern love sonnet

At first, there was a man, without a face;

A way to kill the pain, and have some fun,

I had a little time, and you, the place,  

I knew not then, your love would equal none.

Sometimes a kiss, may only be a kiss,

Perhaps it blooms, becomes the something more,

And you became the one, to claim my bliss.

Your smiling eyes, for me, an open door. 

Now knowing years, may dampen feelings new,

From yesterday till now, though time has passed,

My passion's flame remains, alive, for you!

I only hope our "we" is meant to  last --

Although you didn't see, right from the start,

Remember, that day, I gave you my heart.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Awwww....this is so sweetly romantic. Tender and gentle, this love sonnet was a joy to read, KL. I especially liked "Sometimes a kiss, may only be a kiss," because that is so true. It is when that kiss sparks a whole new world that it is special. Lovely. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I apparently have some iambics to tweak, but I really am procrastinating getting to work and must fly. The new and improved and or anotated sonnet will be re-issued later.:)

[Lydia Shutter]

I am not into form poetry. I just know what works when I read it...and this worked.

[Richard🖌]

Every now and again one comes across a poem that sidles-up warmly to the senses, embraces with sheer beauty and affection, inviting the heart to smile and dance along … and, mine surely does to the enchanting melody of love you've so graciously graced the page with, all the way to my romantic core, KL … wow!
What guy would not be thrilled to have such an enthralling composition created in homage to yours and his love and remembrances.
Gosh, KL, I just love it to pieces … you are sooo lovely in sooo many ways, and sooo talented!
It is such an enjoyment reading you and working with you on your poetry … I feel blessed.
On the techy side, there are some iambic issues we can address by message, if you've a mind to, but I love it, too, just as it stands for the wondrous love poem it is.

Thank you sincerely, deeply, and warmly for sharing You with Us! ⁓ Richard

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks heaps. My goal would be to eventually compose a sonnet that is entirely me, personality intact. This one comes close, although perhaps, some tweaking may actually make it MORE me, not less. Shoot away on the iambics -- I did my best to look up pronunciations and be a good student, I flipped and flopped back and forth more than a few times, and I am sure in the process, flopped them back into the wrong place. But, I have a couple favourite lines -- if it happens to be one of those, I may ask the readers to suspend disbelief with an notation on that line. We shall see. In the interim, to work I must go to pay the bills.

[Richard🖌]

May your day be filled with happy smiles!