The one who waits

Another one from the late night's inspiration

Long is the night; it's so dark.
I hear the nature's calling
as I'm touching the impenetrable walls.
I clutch my arms and think
how good it would be if my grave was any bigger.

Author's Note

Is it to short? Does it have a melody while reading it?

Reviews

[Schatzi]

Hello en skygge,

It is not too short. I was just remarking how amazing I think it is when one can write such a short poem that tells a whole story. It is a wonderful talent. I like your poem and especially the twist at the end. Nicely done!

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi

[en skygge]

Thank you very much for this review, it means a lot! :)

[Tony Jordan]

Idk about melody but it is deliciously dark and the twist was superb.

[Ender Mckenzie]

A poem needs not to be long for it to be "good".
Some fantastic poems are composed of just one sentence. The way you depicted the full story of the poem in such a short manner is a talent on its own. Can't wait to see more of your work.

[en skygge]

Thank you so much for such a supportive review. I'll try to write as often as I can!

[Asante]

This definitely isn't too short. This provides a clear narrative that anyone could follow; it's a concise piece that reads pretty beautifully while leaving things open to interpretation. :)

Great work!