Not a Love Bite

There is no love in this bite. No love will come by nagging.

I love him,

With all my heart

I really want to give up everything

But I cannot give up,

Being a vampire

It's a curse

I am cursed for life!

I am like a monster at night

My lover carries a knife

 

I commanded him to blind it,

Underneath his pillow

He says he feels like a widow

His life is empty

I cannot come out,

In the sunlight

He calls me dead

Then he see's me,

Awake at night

 

I wish I could hear,
His thoughts through the day
Instead I cannot be awake
I have to sleep deeply,
In my coffin
One night I requested to hear,
From his heart and his mind
He could not bury it from me

 

Well he could not any longer
He confessed to me
That he hungers to be a vampire
I stand in shock
I would hate him,
For taking away his well-beloved life
To be a hideous monster like me
I am a murderer

 

I suck the beauty of the innocent
I kill them in their sleep
So they do not open their eyes
To the light and day,
Of their dreadful killing life
I have never touched him
The knife was his saviour
To protect him from me

He will not be able to cope,
Through the agony of the bite
It will hurt me,
To see him cry
It's not that great to be me
But he insisted,
He begged,
He went onto his knees

 

Oh please, oh please
He repeated and screamed
He was not going to give up
He grabbed hold,
Of my moving feet
Strongly glued me to the ground
He became annoying
He continued to nag

As the night went quick
I had not drunk,
A thing, not a drop of blood
My eyes sobbed
He has made me suffer
He refused to use the knife
I was losing control
Longing for a bite

 

I could not bare,
To sleep another day
Without a drink
My teeth sunk,
My teeth sunk into him
After mouthfuls
I stopped in shock
Then I realized what I had done...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Snickers]

I love this it was very impressive. I liked it. Keep up the good work, darling. If I was a vampire and my boyfriend wasn't he would beg, he would want to be a vampire like me. As if he was I would want to, also, because I would want to be with him forever. So did the guy die, or did he become a vampire. So many questions to ask.

[shammi]

hey its very interesting,the love of a vampire and her thirst ...really amazing to read

[sumit]

hello... it's interesting to see how u adumbrated that vampire's( urs may be) love. i liked the way of telling story and the way u showed the darker sides.. which eventually was brighter side in different way.

[Meadow Rayne]

I Really Like it. I Like how its from the vampire's pov and I LOVE how you kept me wondering at the end if she killed him or changed him. Nice job!!

[Tina Kline]

I really love this, seeing the give and take in the vampire's thoughts as she struggle. I wonder if she killed him or did she decide to bring him over? You left the reader wondering!! Wonderful job on this!!

[EverEmma]

Bloodsucker I see. Hmm, very difficult to write about without being compared to Twilight but I think you did it fantastically. Such grim detail and passion put into this piece. Very, very, very, very, very, nice. I am in love with the last stanza. Your lust for blood overpowered you love for him. Absolutely fantastic. You are a monster, a murderer, a killer, a hideous beast, and you hate what you are, but yet he wished to be like you. I love it!!!!!!!! Keep writing more and more like this. I will suck it up like a vampire. lol :)

[Iota]

Oh did you kill him or just turn him?? LOL hmmm Now I will never know. This was a good story the fight to hold off and the urge to do it. He must of really loved her though that was some kind of relationship. great write.

[just rose.]

I like the back-and-forth structure of this, very interesting!

[Wicahpi]

a definite description of what happens to
those who nag too much...and how things
we regret become reality out of anger.

[The Water Queen]

You show the humanity of a vampire. A component most forget. The temptationa make them even more real and human like to the reader. I love the structure of this poem. Great poem