Coffin Big Enough For you and me

This is a old poem for the good people that worry that bad things will happen to them for no reason. Do enjoy.

I told you before we died
I wasn't telling lies
They will build a coffin
Big enough
For just you and me
Our bodies will lie
side by side
tightly tied

So they did bury us
Ten feet underground
Empty space, so small
We couldn't move around
I knew
We would be buried together
Trapped together
We couldn't get out
I hoped we could survive
Being buried alive

But the ropes were so tight
We could not be set free
We slowly suffered underground, you see
Desperate for air
Desperate to escape
From the coffin we shared
Every minute we couldn't bare

Dreading it
That our life's were going to end
Our lungs were suffocating

Death, why does it after to be this way 
We tried
We could not get any air
Side by side we lie
We closed our eyes
Fast a sleep we went

Then I felt I had lost something
My body, I had left
My soul now hand in hand
With him I suffered with
We walked away
And disappeared into the beam of light

Reviews

[deeps]

powerful write here and amazing.

[Adelia Alighieri]

this is beyond amazing; so much technicality and yet so much ease in your work. I loved reading it, thanks for sharing. =)

[Cassiopia Summers]

You are an amazing writer, you can reel in any reader and you create imagery that bursts. (:

[Richard Williams]

A very interesting concept and creative title. There is a darkness entwined, stark and bitter although vindication at the end with walking away, into the light. This was a good twist in the writing.

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I started to read this and thought what I lovely idea...although reading on, maybe not. You created good imagry. thought provoking read.

[Daydreamer54]

Well this was a little senseless to me. Why wouldu get into a coffin with someone ifyou;re bith alive? better yet, ehy share a coffin? Well it is intresting I'll give u that! ly-lie.