Miss Perfect

I don't want to be your friend

You can forget about the love,

You want me to send,

I'm not letting you,

Walk all over me,

You say one thing isn't right,

You talk trash

You have a list of things that’s not right,

 

I won't let you make changes

Just so you can use me in the end

Make me feel I have no self-worth,

When you see me,

Whether you like it or not

You decide to be my friend,

No trash talk,

 

I won't let your thoughts chase me,

So I will be afraid,

Because I don't want to change,

I can tell, what’s on your list: 

I don't want to dress,

To how you want me to,

I won't change my hair

To how you like it

I won't act,

To how you want me to,

This isn't fair

It gives my heart so much pain

I can't be how you want me to be

I don't want to be your MISS PERFECT

If I was, I wouldn't be writing this

Instead I would be dead

 

So think again,

Control freak,

Pick on someone else, not me

 

Reviews

[Crusaderscross]

Individuality is the key to humanity. It is the people that do not have there own that try to control and change others. I really liked you way of writing. It is in your face emotion, true grit. Good job.

[David W Moore III]

Very personal. Very powerful. You are right, you can't be someone different for someone else. I like your poetry. One small thing, it may not be your style, but I'd love to see some more metaphor in this piece such as, I can't be your Barbie Doll or I won't be wrapped up like a present under a tree for you to open Christmas day. That would make it even better. But I like it as is.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good poem. People shouldn't try to change others. I really agree with this because if anyone tried to change me I would beat them up. Or die like you said...anyways good job. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Bud]

Stay true to yourself. Anyone else that matters will be right there along the way. I love the ending. Perfect.

[Ruth]

Its a grteat thing to retain your individuality!
This is a poignant poem love, I adore it :)
Sometimes to feel emotions is to remind ourselves that we are alive! lol
AWESOME
xx

[Liz-z]

Fantastic, truly fantastic!
So much anger... it just really shouts out!
Wonderful poem! :D

[Charles]

This is much like another poem of yours I looked at. There are a few grammatical things that need attention and some more colorful language would would help a bit. I'd try a revision here, but don't give up on the central theme - it seems important to you. Of course, my opinion is just that - opinion. :-)

[Nancy S.]

Powerful, stunning voice of individuality!! Nicely done, Rosie, nicely done.

[Richard Williams]

No one should be controlled or manipulated like a marionette, you've stated it well.

[Andrew Wright]

Perfection is in our imperfections, our ability to be wholly what we are. I think that makes you pretty darn close, if not there. I like this piece, the self-empowering stream of thought shows your ability to be perfect in who you are - not how someone else sees it for you.