Adultery

You sat there

While she got dressed

Taking her clothes off

All she had

Was lust in her heart

The power of lust

Made the bed feel dark

 

The real love,

I was thoughtful about

Felt killed

Choked by her kisses

Broken by her body

Chained by her filthy hands

Stabbed by her teeth

I felt like,

I saw my own death

 

But what did I do

To deserve this?

From you

Of all people

My love,

Can't you see

What you have done to me?

 

I must go

I must run

Before you can stop me

I will be gone

Before you know

Gone from your life

 

Cry,

If you can

Beg,

If you must

But nothing

Will bring me back

 

I will feel healed

Born again

From you crushing

My soul,

Breaking my heart in two

 

For once

I will be happy

As I did something good

And that's to break free

From living with you

 

 

Author's Note

heart-break definitely

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

You can find many a poem talking about love and loss, but this poem is special for a plethora of reasons. You describe adultery exactly as it is -- it is raw, it is violent, it is death returning. You paint a very vivid picture that is both aching and beautiful all in its own way. You have a talent, my friend, and even though this piece is gut wrenching, it is exactly what it is meant to be.

[Rosie C]

Thank you for your incredible and insightful review.

This was a pleasure to read.

[Poetic Beauty]

Being betrayed this way is one of the most awful ways and I have felt that betrayal before. Betrayal comes in many forms and varying degrees. This is one that crushes the heart. the emotions are clearly laid out in this poem.

[Black Cat Fever]

This is a painful story but one many people experience. It's hard to realize sometimes that you're being used or this relationship is going no where.

[Marie Harrison]

Painful write to read. Very sad. I could almost hear your heart breaking. Great job. Change the word to undress instead of dress. Fabulous write.

[Fran Marie]

oh so sad.... albeit beautifully penned in poetic expression~ very nice!

[Tina Kline]

The pain and struggle and guilt, how it can feel like death and when broken free from can feel like a new breath of life. Nicely done.

[Charles]

This is a tough one - a heart breaker. Not a lot of poetic form to it, but the subject matter doesn't need anything but the raw emotion I guess - and you got that nailed. There is a bit of logical error in stanza two... 'while she got dressed / taking her clothes off.' I think the transition from stanza two to stanza three is a bit rough - you've been writing about 'you' and 'her' and suddenly introduce 'I.' I know what's going on (I think) but the sudden appearance of 'I' is jarring enough that I had yo look at it a couple of times... I figure that anything that 'jars' a reader (except for shock poetry) needs to be smoothed out... just an opinion. Keep up your fine work.

[Tomi]

good piece

[Coyote Poetry]

I told my children. Be careful with emotion. We can become dead in heart and soul very quickly. Don't waste your love and kindness on useless people. I like the beginning of this poem. A undertone of need and pain. Life is a fair journey. Each of us must test the boundaries. A very good ending to a powerful poem.
Coyote

[Arya_the_elven_lady]

Oh wow, how sad. This sounds really dark and deep.

[Richard Williams]

You expressed the deep hurt here very well. One can relate.