Adultery

You sat there

While she got dressed

Taking her clothes off

All she had

Was lust in her heart

The power of lust

Made the bed feel dark

 

The real love,

I was thoughtful about

Felt killed

Choked by her kisses

Broken by her body

Chained by her filthy hands

Stabbed by her teeth

I felt like,

I saw my own death

 

But what did I do

To deserve this?

From you

Of all people

My love,

Can't you see

What you have done to me?

 

I must go

I must run

Before you can stop me

I will be gone

Before you know

Gone from your life

 

Cry,

If you can

Beg,

If you must

But nothing

Will bring me back

 

I will feel healed

Born again

From you crushing

My soul,

Breaking my heart in two

 

For once

I will be happy

As I did something good

And that's to break free

From living with you

 

 

Author's Note

heart-break definitely

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

You can find many a poem talking about love and loss, but this poem is special for a plethora of reasons. You describe adultery exactly as it is -- it is raw, it is violent, it is death returning. You paint a very vivid picture that is both aching and beautiful all in its own way. You have a talent, my friend, and even though this piece is gut wrenching, it is exactly what it is meant to be.

[Rosie C]

Thank you for your incredible and insightful review.

This was a pleasure to read.

[Jim]

Good poem. I like the vividness of the descriptions in the third stanza--like being stabbed by her teeth.

[TAO]

Well, I'm glad to see it doesn't only happen to me...insofar as me not being so unique in this arena.

Another well done piece of work.

[R J Askew]

You capture the drama of how life twists many of us around, driving us to crave physical excitements which then leave us confused and regretful as the counter emotions surge over us. Someone will be feeling exactly as you describe right now, possibly even in the same street. It is everywhere.

[Ruth]

This is so touching love! Emotively shattering scenario!
You have captured the emotions of such a heart aching situation really well love!
Wonderful work
xx

[Wolfwind Words]

Finding the strength to walk away from a bad situation always takes courage, yet brings far larger rewards down the road. This piece was powerful, vivid and captured the feelings of pain and need of seperation that was created by a bad situation.

Good Poetry!
Wolfie

[Jenny Nelson]

Surely is, and the folks involved with breaking up the relationships are often so surprised when the same thing they're doing is done to them. Guess they just never see that a louse is a louse. Very strong and emotional write. Well done.

[Dream Weaver]

Sinful lust turning into shameful dust and the
tracks that it leaves behind when you run...
well done.

Adultery;
A voluntary sexual relations between a married
person and somebody other than his or her spouse

[David W Moore III]

the tempo was fast, like you were racing to get away from him, it compliments the message in the poem itself. great piece.

[PaperHearts]

This was a really captivating write! I liked how you seemed to pour everything you had into this piece, as it made it a really believable and relatable poem. There were moments, particularly towards the end, where I felt as though you lost some of the intensity that was prominent at the start of the piece, but in saying that, I liked the fact that you were able to showcase the multiple dimensions of such a situation in a really simple and hard-hitting way. Great work,
~PaperHearts

[Erin]

In your author's note, it's "heart-break," not "heart-brake." I don't know much about the differences in the words in the UK versus the US though. Break means to shatter into a million pieces, brake means to slow down.
The good news about that grammar fixation is that I didn't find any in your poem. I actually liked it a lot. The description helped the kinda nervous yet kinda solemn tone at the same time tone. Your poem was fast paced and intense. The message was pretty clear. Nice job.
PBP