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Albert's Poetry Caf� challenge: A COIN POEM: Line 1 has 7 syllables; line 2 has 5 syllables; line 3 has 7 syllables; line 4 has 5 syllables. The rhyme pattern is either abcb or aabb

 

 

Say cheeeeese! - Click… click

 

 

Here you are! Smiling soulless!

 

For eternity

Imprisoned in stillness!

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Albert's Poetry Caf� challenge: A COIN POEM: Line 1 has 7 syllables; line 2 has 5 syllables; line 3 has 7 syllables; line 4 has 5 syllables. The rhyme pattern is either abcb or aabb

The concept of this poem is great. Why not revise it so that you maintain the meaning but make the poem conform to the coin-poem requirements? Then you'd be in the running for an award.

Sal

[Gandré]

A wonderful poem... here I think about the statues in museum of Madam Tussaud in New York City.. they smiled for ever with their cheeese....this was the experience of reading your poem. who cares of syllables - when the message is so strong? I find the review of previous reviewer missed.

[Poeticpiers]

Intererstin but does not quite fit the form M lady