�War Hero�

A Poem by angelina neves

Albert's Poetry Caf� - USING TEN WORDS, WRITE A POEM THAT IS NO MORE, OR LESS THAN 40 WORDS: Pitch/ Throat /Scraped /Landed /Lamentations / Breaking /Fat /Sorrow /Alphabet /Unpolished

Scrapped history

Breaking reality

Into fat sorrow

Decorated frill:

Mission to kill

Unpolished existence

Landed in lamentations

Behind each pitch to fame

“Cut one’s throat”

Is the evil game

Recognition filed

Alphabet or number

Inexistence touch

The human is dead

….

© 2008 angelina neves

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Wondering Mind

This is a fine piece of powerful poetry, even more so considering the constraints.

Posted 16 Years Ago

Morning Song

Wow. Great job on using the ten words!!!

What a powerful poem, my dear friend, and filled with your usual natural wisdom, the type of wisdom that cannot be taught in school. It is an awareness of human nature. You would think that mankind, after reading the pages of history, that we would learn the price and futility of war. And yet, we do it again and again, and again.

"The human is dead..." Wow. Your ending sentence scares the heck out of me. (sigh).

Great big hugs and kisses....
Jeri

Posted 17 Years Ago

kruser23

i thought i would reply to a piece of yours, since you replied to one of mine.

This was very powerful in its brevity. I think the colour really added to the strength too, sort of gave it a certain feeling even prior to the read.

Anways, im babbling. Nice work.

Posted 17 Years Ago

Sharon Miller Bolander

Well done, Angi! Perfect ending, too. Sharon

Posted 17 Years Ago

Frank Terino

the ending is quite poerful, this is an excellent weaving of words, and as equally creative
at executing the challange. Clever and crafty, I enjoyed reading this great poem, thanks