Darkness

Strolling down the alley alone at night, 

Living the dark and fearing the light. 

Hiding elsewhere when the sun comes to bright. 

Avoiding the light of fright. 

For I have been in hide ever since the day I was here.

Even afraid of going over a weir. 

Like the dark I am hidden. 

Hidden from the light of forbidden. 

Savoring the sweet sense of fear in the dark 

Leaving at the sight of spark. 

Seeing what I can do in the sense of fear, 

I am never going to be back with a tear. 

The tear of love. 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Suggestions Please! :)

Reviews

[Arya Le Dasmones]

I really like the line "Living the dark and fearing the light", and that there are varying lengths of lines- it keeps the rhythm somewhat choppy and the reader engaged. You lost me at the last three lines the first time I read it; the twist to the poem's ending could be a tad more defined, but it's still a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing

[SaRuGi]

^3^ thank you~ I'll try and see what improvements i can do for the end... um.... ;)

[Arya Le Dasmones]

:D You could make it longer so the world can see more of your brilliance

[SaRuGi]

haha, I wanna try short~ :P I changed it! See how it is~ and what other things i can change ;)

[spiritwind]

Suggestions? Write more of this beautifully expressed poetry! This is getting to the core of fear promptly and giving the reader a shiver right in the beginning: "Living the dark and fearing the light.
Hiding elsewhere when the sun comes to
bright"
This is chilling. "Like the dark I am hidden. "
There are tiny translation into English mistakes but I think they lend charm and mystery to your work.

[SaRuGi]

Thank you!! :):)