Strums Of Silence

in conversation with oneself, to question and reason out with your soul

Lips may stay silent,

But the silence lingers on,

As they turn into words

And speak to me.

In those melting tears, 

Held in your eyes,

What will you melt?

With the aching heart,

Dipped in melancholy,

What will you rinse?

In the disguised smiles

And the playful winks,

What will you hide? 

In the flames of past

And the pains that don't last,

Will you burn your Identity?

In numbness of void

Tied to the shackles of blame,

Will you bury those untrue lies?

On the walks of life,

When the reality bites

And the steps stumble,

Would you abandon

Those dreams in fear?

O' you mute soul

Even I'm a part of you.

Hear my mum words

And see those unturned gleams.

05/02/2008 , A.H.

Reviews

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you are really doing this job... There is a sparkle of thought in each line, there are stories and ideas connected within each line. It's become one of my favorites again. I'm starting to get addicted to your poems, and it's not an addiction I want to get save.
"In the flames of past
And the pains that don't last,
Will you burn your Identity?"

I'm amazed that you wrote these years ago.It seems very strange to me because it makes me realize that people thought, questioned and that life existed before me. Of course your words were probably always in a gold mine

[A.H.]

B, so glad to hear, you connected to this poem. as always, your thoughts are most welcome. yes, I wrote this years ago, for a friend who was in distress and hoped this write would help them see a way out of that darkness. thanks again for reading and this wonderful review. take care!

[.]

Aww such a nice story behind this.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Nice! Poetry in fact is conversations with self in external form via metaphor and poetic licence! Or at least that is one way to view it.
I hear the weight
beneath your silence,
the words trapped
between breaths.
You have not disappeared—
only folded into the quiet,
where voices soften but do not fade.

[A.H.]

Thank you for this thoughtful review, Fred. I'm sorry for the late response, hope you're doing good. take care!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Hope you are doing good as well, haven’t seen you around in a while. 🕊️🙏🏻

[A.H.]

All good, thank you Fred.

[Kady R.]

What a wonderful poem!! "Burning identity, would you abandon those dreams in fear" its hard to not loose yourself in certain areas of life. Something I had to learn later on in life is boundaries, and to not loose myself in a relationship. Staying true to yourself is something I have valued in the most recent years. There's only so long you can hide yourself just like the poem your poem said. Thanks for sharing it was very insightful!!

[A.H.]

Thank you for this review Kady. I'm glad to hear your thoughts, much appreciated!

[Lorry]

It is the one thing we all do, whether we want to or not. Question ourselves constantly and usually without invitation, when all we were hoping for was a good night's sleep.
Sometimes if we listen closely enough we may even come up with an answer, or at least acceptance that there is something wrong to sort.

[A.H.]

true thoughts, thanks so much Lorry for reading and sharing those words on this write.

[MCS]

Powerful piece of writing, dear poet. Those inner conversations are not for the weak of heart.

[A.H.]

Thank you much, deeply appreciate your thoughts on this write :)

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. Powerful writing.

[A.H.]

Thank you much Thomas.

[red93]

Fabulous AH, seeing the World thru someone else's eyes, and lifting their burden for them. Really Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[A.H.]

Thank you red for reading and sharing a review.. your thoughts and words, much appreciated !

[Chris Shaw]

I feel a sunken soul here. Sunk to the depths of the ocean floor who can not recall the gleams in life. Feels like depression. Great poetic expression Abhi and I enjoyed the format and structure of your stanzas.

Chris

[A.H.]

Actually, wrote this poem for a friend, who was in distress. I hoped I could uplift them through reasoning and thoughts of this write. Thank you much Chris for reading and sharing a thoughtful review on this write!

[barleygirl]

The best thing about your poem, for me, is the way you ask many questions of the other person as if you really want to know. So often, poets have all the answers & supposing what the other person is thinking or feeling (a bad human trait). I crave a poem where the narrator asks the best kinds of questions which show he/she really wants to understand this other person. Also, overall, your writing is fresh & original & unexpected, even tho you're writing about familiar stuff, you make interesting observations that fall outside the norm -- and I love living outside the norm! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[A.H.]

the only way to understand anything is to ask questions, as many questions as you can :) We need to make effort to understand the other person, if we really care.. everyone needs a patient hearing or a nudge or a conversation to know beyond the ordinary. Thank you for making pertinent observations on my writing and value your thoughts and perceptions on my writes. Thanks much, Margie. Cheers, Abhi

[barleygirl]

I love your attitude . . . more people with this approach would cut down on the constant-critic approach of so many . . .

[A.H.]

I hear you Margie :)
Thank you so much again for taking time to read me and share your thoughts on my writes.
Really appreciate it, Cheers Abhi

[X]

of mum words and silent cries...the things we reveal and the things we hide...the few we allow to see us naked and vulnerable...

In numbness of void
Tied to the shackles of blame,
Will you bury those untrue lies?

How deep does it get?

[A.H.]

very well put, Kira. I like your thoughts on this and agree. We may need to swim to our depths and uncover the treasures that lay beneath the clutter of ourselves. Truly! Thank you for reading this and stopping by !

[X]

Always my pleasure!