two feet and ice

a moment of reflection during my walk on an icy cold day ...

isn't this life much like, 

walking on a thin ice sheet?

if you push too hard,

you might slip, fall, and slide, 

bruising your bottoms.

if you push too slow,

you might be stuck on the ice,

with icy cold feet.

it's all about finding balance, 

isn't it?

my two feet,

and I tiptoe a step,

then another step,

then another, 

I'm past the

glassy ice sheet. 

it's strange how we know,

and yet, we still don't know.

then, I thought to myself,

don't be too happy when you win,

don't be too sad when you lose,

don't lose your heart and mind over,

just do your thing,

and let it be.

- AH, 02/21/2025

Reviews

[Martiya Daman]

I really like the poem! It makes me think about life like walking on ice. Sometimes, if you go too fast, you might fall, and if you go too slow, you get stuck. The poem talks about finding a balance.

I like how you say we should not be too happy when we win or too sad when we lose. It's cool how the poem teaches us to just keep going and not worry too much. It’s a nice reminder to take things step by step!
Lovely work, Abhi! Keep going!

Martiya

[A.H.]

Thanks for such a lovely review, Martiya. Appreciate your thoughts. I'm amazed how deep you thought and expressed it, so nice.. yes, baby steps, step by step :)

[emmajoygreen]

Maybe it's life that's ice.. and, if we mislay our rights we go slipping off our planet! Off and away floating in space with the flotsam snowballs, bad language, melting sleet and bad will win if we're not careful with the stakes! Is how it is.. either obey the rules or slip down in someone's opinion! We all walk a slippery path, and are either helped or harmed as we take dodgy routes which leads to.. dodgy holes that have a sign.. Take care,, think of a see-saw, make sure you keep to your ground.. go neither that way or that way!

[A.H.]

yeah a bit of see-saw, keep ground and try to balance as much as you can. Glad to hear your perspectives, emmajoygreen. Thank you for reading and sharing those thoughts.

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This is definitely one of your best poems. You explained it so well that I was amazed. Yes, everything is about balance. After all, if you take two steps with one foot, you won't get anywhere, you have to use both feet. If I didn't know you would be spoiled, I wanted to write a very detailed review for this, but otherwise you will be too high and won't be able to stay balanced :D so I'm keeping it to myself this time.

"just do your thing,
and let it be." i really needed that. thanks poet.

Damn it's hard to want to write a thesis for this poem but not want to stroke the author's ego...
jk you are one of the bests, and this is one of your bests.

[A.H.]

In many ways, balance is what we need and what we must always strive for, I think. IMO, it's such a crucial aspect of our lives - only if we can ever find that balance, learn how to hold it and put things in perpsective, we could save ourselves from both deep pain and extreme euphoria.

Haha, don't worry - I'm all about searching and practicing balance these days, so there's no risk of getting carried away, lol. I’m always happy to hear your insights.
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your wonderful thoughts. Appreciate it, Beren. Take care, Abhi.

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. Spring will be here soon.

[A.H.]

Thank you Thomas. yeah waiting for spring, but enjoying the snow while it lasts :)

[MCS]

Thin ice is a great analogy describing the uncertainty and chaos we are facing moment by moment these days. It’s become a balancing act and I wonder how long we can sustain it. Brilliant piece of writing.

[A.H.]

Thank you for reading and sharing those thoughts on this write. Appreciate it very!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes the thoughts in our heads are treading on ice as well...can we achieve a balance to keep ourselves from falling.
Not always...but it is still betting to move forward with courage...at least attempt to.
Safe isn't what achieves...risk usually does.
j.

[A.H.]

thank you for those thoughts, j. I'm glad you stopped by and shared your perspectives.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Exactly how I felt one naughty day when we tested the ice in the lake… but it’s the same on any icy surface… the black ice is particularly treacherous to navigate. The last stanza brings it within shoving it, like the classic morality tales done with finesse and lasting effect 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊️

[A.H.]

yeah, black ice can be tricky. When not careful, I have slipped and fallen, while navigating it so I totally get it :D thank you for reading and sharing your comments on this write. Appreciate it, Fred.

[redd Brick Keshner]

Most welcome A.H.
Freds.

[Dylan Macadham]

Very nicely versed AH, and great advice!
I call it being "laid back", my kid's call it "Chill," which I never quite got, until just now!😅

[A.H.]

haha, that's a nice tidbit there. yeah laid back and chill - can't agree more. thanks much Dylan for reading and sharing your thoughts. Appreciate it.

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Hey AH,

Thanks for sharing your penmanship with us, it was a pleasant read. The last two lines resonate most with me.

Sometimes accepting things that are beyond our control, or perhaps more so that the actions of others are beyond it, is the most sensible outlook.

It’s a shame, I think, that too few of us are content with that.

Anyways, thanks for sharing.

-Ook

[A.H.]

Thanks for your visit, Ookpik. Appreciate these thoughts. I'm glad last two lines connected with you. Best, A.H.

[John the Baptist]

Indeed, moderation is the surest path. It's the extremists who cause all the trouble for others and themselves.

[A.H.]

true. moderation and middle path. agree! thanks so much for reading and leaving a review on this write. Appreciate it very, John. Take care!