details

a poem about feeling trapped in the details of life

details
drip thin and sharp
like rain inside a fog
 

falling like needles
piercing my skull
down my neck
settling into me
each one a weight
 

they fall slowly
 

i could escape
but yet i don’t
 

pelted
 

my life
barren
void
but full of details

Reviews

[S.S.P.]

you've condensed the last ten years of my life into 16 lines. excellent poem.

[Crowley]

Nicely done. "drip thin and sharp" really nice line. Super moody and poignant. I loved it. Thanks for letting me read, keep up the good work and keep posting.

[Zarathustra]

Very very Good!!
Loved every moment spent reading

falling like needles
piercing my skull
down my neck
settling into me
each one a weight...

Perfect!!