Sometimes...

Sometimes, I crave for solitude,

But I  fear being left alone.

Sometimes, I want the darkness to end,

But, I'm afraid to see the dawn.

Sometimes, I want to believe in lies,

Because the truth is so painful.

Sometimes, I want to know the bitter truth,

I want you to always be faithful.

Sometimes, I just wish you were by my side,

Sometimes, I wish you didn't belong to me.

Sometimes, I want you to guide me,

Sometimes, I want you to let me be.

Sometimes, I pretend to smile,

Because, my pain, I don't want you to know.

Sometimes, I know who I am,

Sometimes, I pretend to know...

Author's Note

Thanks if you choose to review... I wrote it months back, so, I'm not so sure about it... Comments and critique welcome...!!

Reviews

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

not silly at all, i feel this way all the time. i like the way you've written this, it perfectly conveys the emotions. there is a fine line between love & hate. maybe not exactly hate on your part (although it is in my situation). only constructive criticism i can give you is i don't think you need quite so many commas: after sometimes & but, & in the sentence "Because, my pain, I don't want you to know" i think you can take out all those commas. but only minor grammar things. i like this poem alot & can relate. good job.

[Offline]

Sometimes, I want you to write more.
Great work! We all have moments like this. It's rich and encrusted with emotion, with a dash of deception and hinted violence for good measure. My heart says this poem is splendid...

[Tomi]

love the contradictions

[Reena Rainne]

You definately convey the message of being indecisive. I certainly can relate to this poem. I think that we all experience these feelings of "sometimes" that you portray here. I really enjoyed reading this. :)

[Jessica Mai]

This is great. You expressed the meaning so beautifully. Well done

[Dev]

I like this.. The contrasting variability of your words is just a reminder of how we face different problems in life and the dilemma with each.. Good write

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a beautiful complexity to your words... we are all filled with a depth... with rivers that mingle and flow... cold and hot... highs and lows... Your words express this richness so perfectly!

[Jessie]

I really like this write! It all flowed so naturally...thanks for sharing..tc..

[PaperHearts]

I really liked this! This was so heartwrenching in it's honesty, and I could really relate to every word you said in this piece. I loved the lines:
'Sometimes, I want the darkness to end,
But, I'm afraid to see the dawn.'
These lines struck me the most out of your whole poem. They evoked such strong memories and emotions, and I personally felt that these were the most powerful lines within your poem.
The only thing about your poem that I thought was a little strange was how you ended the third to last line with the word 'know', and you also ended the last line with the word 'know' as well. For me, when I read your poem through, having these two words so close together kind of killed the flow of it for me. I hope I'm making sense to you!? Perhaps just read it through and decide for yourself?
Other than that, this poem was really great! A thought-provoking read!
~PaperHearts

[Q'ANIL]

what exactly is silly about this??? you created it you should be extremely proud of it...i enjoyed it, even in its rawness...if you're not completely happy with it, take some time before re-reading and rewriting...as far as i can see it came from your soul...it was good...well done...

~CJM