Down the Rabbit Hole

Written in May 2008.

Her soft velvet laugh

            Wrapped around me like

                        The sweetest chains,

Binding me to her surely and softly,

            So softly in fact she doesn’t

                        Know the trap she’s set for me.

 

Punch-drunk and quickly

            Falling I grasp for something,

                        Anything,

To stop my free fall.

            Instead all I find is

                        sea-glass-green eyes.

 

Do I say something?

            Call out to the intangible

                        Dark voice and shining eyes?

Can I call out,

            When I know no help would be offered?

                        That there isn’t any to give?

 

Falling in love with

            Your best friend:

                        Not unsimilar to Falling

Down a rabbit whole,

            Offers no comfort,

                        And no relief.

 

Especially when she’s in love with someone else.

                        

Author's Note

I'm not sure if I like this. But I can't decide if that is because it is legitimately bad or just personal and kinda tender... So I need your opinions.

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I think it's a great piece, i like it alot because it is personal and kind of tender in it's way... some of the best poems are from the most personal parts of your mind... i know my favorites are some of the most personal ones that i have read.... This is good, it has some great emotions and it just makes me want to give you a hug for some reason... soo... *hug* great job!

~Imperfectly Me~

[Adela Muresan]

I think the feelings you expressed are very noble, and that makes a good love poem.

The association with the rabbit whole eight's good dough :) , Alice came out in the end � when you fall in love ,there's no out.

Nice job.

A.M

PS: and even if you weren't Alice, you can still get out of a rabbit whole :P :D .

[huma]

good portrait of longing. beautiful voice, not sentimental in the least which is always challenging in these kinds of poems.

unsimilar should be dissimilar