Avoidance

This is crap. Complete and utter crap. But it's the best of what I've been able to do recently so I'm posting since I haven't posted something is forever.

Misunderstandings lead to frosted glares

Avoidence without reasoning

spiralling confusion.

Lost in a crowd and afraid to speak

in fear of saying something wronge

when lately nothing seems to be right.

Tension builds, head pounding, vision failing.

Cigarette after cigarette dissolves into a cloud of smoke

as I try to reason out what went wrong.

A voice unreconisable after the tears

hands shaking from lack of sleep and too much caffine.

 

Whatever it was, whatever was said...

............................

......................

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I'm sorry.

Author's Note

This is crap. Complete and utter crap. But it's the best of what I've been able to do recently so I'm posting since I haven't posted something is forever.

Reviews

[Adela Muresan]

I think you describe a feeling most of us have felt ,that you aren't being understood and that everything you do is wrong, but in time you learn how to keep kool and you solve your problems.

Anywayz I like the poem because of the sincerity it was written in. ( or at least thx to the impression of sincerity it creates lolz )

A.M.

[Avery James]

I'm really into how you use things that I can relate to. Especially the line: " Cigarette after cigarette dissolves into a cloud of smoke." We have similar styles, I think. Not a bad poem at all.

[Delilah Dunn]

This is most definately not "crap". This is an almost haunting and very well articulated vision into the thoughts of the "author". It is an insight into the inner realm of a person who is wrestling with their thoughts, their feelings, and events that may be going on in life. I found it very well written and quite touching. Nice piece.

[Anima Inspired]

It's not "crap"...this is the wanderings of a poet's mind...a poet who has lost some direction, that's all. Sometimes it's in times of blockage that we are able to gather ourselves the most...Plath actually wrote about this in a poem, though the title escapes me...

So...I feel the strength in the words, and the emotions are obvious and true. Keep writing...the words will come again.

[Areya Valena]

First off. i dont think this is crap its an amazing poem, and i can relate as well.... Great