12:oo MN

Just a bunch of words that hit my mind before a night's sleep.

There’s the moon

Bright as it seems

With its ray,

Touching my face

At the middle of the night

While I gather my tears.

Author's Note

Hello there. :) This is my first poem on this site, hope you like it. :)

P.S. I actually wrote 12:oo mn last November 2013.

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

Lovely poem, short yet it tells much, I love how you describe this emotion of sadness with a setting. Great write!

[Tricia Pattinson]

The ending was unexpected but.....it did impact me! Well done!

[Aprille]

Thank you. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong description create vision of a sad and a lonely place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aprille]

Thanks. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Emily]

Love it! It's cute, Keep it up!

[Aprille]

Thank you. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I plucked it from the pile, nicely done imagery, with few words and maximum impact.

[Aprille]

Thank you so much.

[priya]

Nicely penned Olive. its beautiful. :)

[Aprille]

Thank you Priya. :)

[priya]

my pleasure Olive. :)

[J. K. Beach]

A beautiful image, Olive! The last line is a shock because everything seemed so peaceful and pleasant. But then, the moon is a melancholy soul and is never bright and gay. Nicely done! Keep 'em coming!

[Aprille]

Thanks. :) I just couldn't sleep and I stared at the moon that time, missing home then those words came to me.

[Kieta!]

This is a very nice first poem! :) Great job and welcome to Writers Café :)

[Aprille]

thanks you for the the very first person to review my first poem here. :)