Betrayal II

Used like a cigarette stick,

as I burnt myself,

to be relished by her

with every puff,

only to realize

being crushed,

to the grounds of humiliation,

once the purpose was dispersed.

The stench of betrayal

haunts her lips

till eternity.

- C Kumar

July 25 2015

Reviews

[Connie]

Excellent write! The stench of betrayal haunts her lips till eternity- loved it!

[andrew mitchell]

I like the metaphor in this, as even a ciggie is a betrayal pretending to be your friend but is actually killing you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Treachery kills you while you still live.
Beautifully put this in so few words.
I loved the interesting intensity of last three lines, the best.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for appreciating my work Jyoti :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome, Chirag.

[wordman]

lol,a big part of life it seems

[Perkele.7885]

Betrayal, is the bane of my conscious self. I think it as a crime worse than murder>

[Chirag Kumar]

It kills a person every moment.!

[Willard Wells]

You may have been used, but then again Chirag, from your writing I expect you enjoyed it anyway and moved on. Hahaha. Fun piece I liked even if you were the butt of the story is seems.

[Chirag Kumar]

Yeah. I moved on Willard. No point in crying over it. Thanks for stopping by :)