Day is Night

A nightmare about being alone

What I am none seems to know

my friends leave me by the many

I am the consumption of my dreams

till I find I haven't realized any

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Into the nothing of the noise

surrounding us all the where

A life of waking dreams abides

a living breathing nightmare

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My days are raging shipwrecks

on the tumultuous waves of life

Scattered as to the four winds

upon the rocks that are my strife

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I long for the days of childhood

when friends were like my brothers

Strength of virtue crowned my head

loved and untouched by any others

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Certain purpose was my goal

no question on the morrow

I woke to conscience that was clear

courage and faith I didn't borrow

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Now the dawn speaks of the dark

closing in upon my soul

With every day I linger on

my life rages out of control

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful picture! Like your poem it has a dark, brooding atmosphere, the gradual extinguishing of the human spirit. I so want to light a candle and have it flicker your thoughts into something lighter.

Grand meter and use of words, sad, sad, sad thoughts and wishes.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

darkness sorrow lost grips each of us here and there~

[Wondering Mind]

Even the moon has it's dark side. Beautifully sad, even when dark.

[My Fair Lady]

This is unusally dark for what I am used to seeing from your writing Tate. However I like it and it comes at a particular time where it has profound meaning for me personally. Somehow, your writing always touches me in ways I didn't expect and it is really beautiful. I love the song also.

[StacyPerry]

"My life rages out of control" -- If I could have a $1 for every time I have stated that within my own mind, then I would be able to share the billions with people.....

Beautifully written

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Interesting work..I hope that some control comes to your life...Or is this a topic about life in general..Sunflower

[deeps]

This is a wonderful write Tate, I like the picture.

[Angel Bird]

- I am the consumption of my dreams
- till I find I haven't realized any

So familiar this sounds -

- I long for the days of childhood
- when friends were like my brothers
- Strength of virtue crowned my head
- loved and untouched by any others

I know exactly what you mean. So happy and exuberant those days without all of the responsibilities, stresses and strains of nowadays... Good thing we can still go down memory lane.

Great write wonderfully demonstrating gravity of dark.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

this is a wonderful poem and i love the picture so much. that is really neat

[nono]

Daylight is furry that shines through the light of pity. I like this nice job it's beautiful and wonderfully portrayed.