Influenza

30/07/2012

In the dark I wait

Cornering myself to the wall

Contaminated with a disease

That the mind cannot control

Voices echo in my head

Laughing and poking fun at me

I clasped my head and dragged down my hair

Asking them to stop

Then silence and I saw myself seated in front of me

Killing the pain that forced me to die

Author's Note

Sometimes words cannot express how much one is hurt at times ... but i just wrote what came to me .. nothing personal .. just expressing .. your comments are appreciated =)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of language in the poem. The title caught my attention. The use of your description create vision of sickness. A very interesting poem. Left mystery and I wanted to read more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Amila Jay]

Glad you liked it. Thanks :))

[J.V. Stanley]

Feels like me the past week. I've felt miserable. I always admire shorter poems because I have trouble being concise in my poetry (something I should start practicing I think). I like it, good job!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

interesting, it has a great rhythm !
Good job

[Sahar moonlight]

and you have perfectly expressed yourself.
It does reflect the feelings and pain.

nice work!

[Amila Jay]

Thanks =)

[Ruth]

I really like the title in relation to the pain held with intensity in this piece!
xoxo

[reflectingus]

You are definitely right. Sometimes pain is so intense, that it becomes difficult to word it. Sometimes we don't know the pain someone is suffering, until we suffer it ourselves. Nevertheless, you have managed to capture the pain in a very likely manner, and I could feel the poignancy in those words.

[Aehr]

amazing piece of expressions... loved it!

[Leslie Philibert]

What I think is especially good in this is the fantastic line, I clasped my head and dragged down my hair, a really, really great observation. The kind of line that makes you think...that`s it, that`s true. You should be very pleased with this.

[Amila Jay]

Thanks a bunch for that =)

[Art Sun]

poetry and emotions entangle themselves within the expressions we create as the words and thoughts are laid out...nice work...

[Amila Jay]

Thanks =)

[Rhea752]

The title had intrigued me the moment i saw it. well done i really enjoyed this poem.

[Seyi Ojenike]

Yes you did it, expressing your emotions. That is one style of a good poet, to be able to express your feeling... And you did just that