A Seasonal Tree

A tree standing.

A green tree just stands there.

It's summer, but all it does is stand.

A breeze blows by and the leaves rustle; they quiver.

But then it just stands there, stands tall.

Summer rolls by and autumn appears.

A red tree just stands there.

Glossy leaves the colour of wine sway on a black frame.

A breeze blows by and its blood spills to the earth,

But then it just stands there, quite bare.

Autumn drifts by and winter arrives.

A leafless tree just stands there.

Opaque icicles hang from the branches like jewel fangs.

A breeze whistles by and glass fangs sink into the ground,

But then it just stands there, quite sad.

Winter dwindles by and spring flourishes again.

There is no tree standing.

Author's Note

I wrote this because I was looking at a picture with a vivid red tree and I wanted to write something about it. This is what came. The original was short and not good to me so this is the newer version. Enjoy. Written on Thursday 17/6/10 at 9:02pm.

Reviews

[Looouise]

Its summer - It's

leaves rustles and quivers - rustle and quiver

This is a good poem. :] You've done a good job of portraying the seasonal e/affects of a tree in natures cycle. :] And I love how you repeat that the tree just stands there - giving emphasis on the fact that the tree is just that, and that it has no control over what's happening to its branches and seeds. :]

I also like how you've left the ending open to interpretation. I was going to say that winter killed it off, unable to let it carry on - as winter in terms of poetry and such generally alludes to the end of something. :] So, maybe that's what's up. My other suggestion was that maybe it just burnt up - seeing as you're from Aussie and you're prone to bush fires. ;)

Naw, that was a neat poem to read :]

[Revolved]

This is really good! I love the way you describe it! :)

[JuliePetunia]

I feel bad for the tree, I want to be it's friend! You have incredibly beautiful imagery!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you draw a viviv seasonal cycle of tree~ leaving the ending to the reader to imagine why there is no more~ did it metamorphose in a silver shift in forest glade~ was it axed~did it uproot and move elsewhere~ =)~
much enjoyed~