The Huntress

Escorting me everywhere

With an aura of darkness,

Mimicking my bearing,

My gesture and my velocity.

Relieve her, I cannot.

She’s adhered to my spirit,

Leaching my emotions,

Yearning for dominion.

My shadow, so still

Whenever I’m rooted,

Seemingly harmless,

But I assure you she’s not.

Whispering in the silence,

Mocking through the wind,

Vanishing from my vision

To return with sudden malice.

I resist its temptation,

The pull towards its level,

Longing for lower ground

To entwine with my body.

This reflection of obscurity,

It’s lingering in the darkness,

Stalking my presence,

Awaiting my submission.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[C. Rose]

leaching my emotions, sudden malice, entwine, awaiting my submission are my favorite lines.
Well penned :)
Creates a very anxious/downtrodden mood

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[JC]

intriguing and dark, I find myself wanting to know about this dark side....

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Steve L.]

Love the content and flow. And epsecially the word choices!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Rana]

Oh so unique is the nature of this poem and of the little messege conveyed in here. Also, You managed to get such a fine climax in this brief piece of work.. Delicious :P .. Your perspective is one thing I admire.!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much :D

[ANM]

Shadows love em or hate em we can't get rid of em! Liked this well written.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[ANM]

You are welcome! And thanks for the friend invite!

[Einstein Noodle]

ooooooooo nice dark piece says i .. your title drew me in .. i especially appreciate your use of ones shadow as an analogy as well as a metaphor ...

the darkness within rises to the surface only to disappear as our shadows do .. i think its very creative .. nice one for sure .. put it in my library :)
E.

[Briana O'Connor]

Aww thank you so much :D

[R Smith]

I like this, its kinda creepy with the stalking and obvious following you but you seem to give it light in describing the action and almost motives of your shadow, if anyone chose to write about their shadow I would recommend they read this first its a great work :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Eerie poem. Very well done

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Sami Khalil]

"But I assure you she’s not.

Whispering in the silence,
Mocking through the wind,"

I like the Leary and eerie aspect of this marvelous write.You are on a roll...:)..........

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[MomzillaNC]

Very cool rumination upon your shadow! So much more could be read in these lines too… of our search for ourselves and meaning in our souls and our lives.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.