Here's to Me

a suicidal song

 

Here's to the boys I never kissed

To all my exes I never missed

Here's to my friends on the internet

To my own darling whom I never met

Here's to the gown I'll never wear

To all the children I will never bear

Here's to my mother and her pity shares

To my old dad who never really cares

 

Here's my shot at life

Box of pills and a kitchen knife

Here's to the girl that was never me

Oh, here's to me. Cheers to me!

Here's my shot at life

A stolen gun and a kitchen knife

Here's to the heaven I will never see

Oh, here's to me. Cheers to me!

 

Here's to the tears I haven't shed

To all my thoughts I have left unsaid

Here's to the joy I never knew

To all the promises I'll never do

Here's to the candles I'll never blow

To hopeful dawn that will never show

Here's to the faith I now forsake

To the fruits of this one mistake

 

Here's my shot at life

Box of pills and a kitchen knife

Here's to the girl that was never me

Oh, here's to me. Cheers to me!

Here's my shot at life

A stolen gun and a kitchen knife

Here's to the heaven I will never see

Oh, here's to me. Cheers to me!

Author's Note

Avril Lavigne will be perfect for this song. :)

Reviews

[Mark]

mmm... dark but in a cheery sort of way. I like it!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Just as I intended it to be. Thank you, Mark. :)

[Mittens]

Blue, I had no idea you were into song lyrics too. Very interesting. Although, just as with poetry, I'm a complete dunce in regards to song writing (also tone deaf, so I can't even help with the music). It's a very interesting take on topic, although, there's one thing I'm noticing is left unexplored (although it could very well be by design) and that the normal question when suicide becomes a topic... Why? I think a little tragic line subtly plugged in there could help illicit some audience tears.

Very interesting read; wish I could hear how you imagined it to sound.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Matt, thank you for this. :) I am not originally a songwriter but there are times when a poem seems to have a musical quality it suddenly becomes a song in my head. I have written few songs. One is entitled "No More" which I posted here. I have some unfinished and they're here, too ("Unfinished songs").

I am thinking of posting a video/audio on how this song is supposed to sound but my voice isn't that good enough. Maybe one of these days, I will send you a link and I'll be looking forward to hearing your opinion. :)

[Rocans (Asher)]

Exemplary piece. I guess your name Blue is quite apt. The cadence is nice and the overall seeming euphemism is a bit haunting. Reminds me of one of my own pieces. Great stuff, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Rocans. I"m looking forward to reading your works soon. (I am a fan of tragic writings.)

[Rita L. Sev]

This is so well written, and poignant, Blue. Suicide is the topic, but the reminders of all that would be mised in life is a thoughtful deterrent. Excellent piece.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I hope all the suicidal people out there wil soon realize what they'll be missing in life if they attempt to kill themselves. Thank you, Rita. :)

[zaneybear]

this is such a powerful piece, I really feel for the one behind these words, it's beautifully constructed and reads just like a song. well done!! keep writing

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for the empathy, Zaney. Well-appreciated. :)

[Revolutionary]

Sad well written reads like a song.here is to you good job

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you! :)

[Ruth]

Sometimes, we do have to scream it out and look at life face on...I understand the premise of this powerful piece, I just hope the writer knows they are not alone :) xx

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Ruth! The writer is not alone indeed. :)

[Tam Warink]

A torch singer perhaps, piano, drums, sax - a trio + 1; a voice, husky and sultry, "Mmmm here's my shot at life .. a stolen gun and a kitchen knife, oh here's to the heaven I'll never see .. oh here's to me, cheers to me." {sax solo} redeux bridge & coda & finale. Another round for the table in the corner, Sam. Here's a 100; that ought to cover it.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow, Tam. You seem to be an expert on this. I hope to hear your suggestion. Thank you. :)

[Eddie Davis]

Well, it was a brilliantly crafted poem, the rhyming was outstanding. Suicide poems sort of worry me though, as I used to write them myself when I was a teenager. I hope a despondent girl doesn't find this very memorable poem and decide to leave it as her own suicide note.

You definitely have got a master muse inspiring you, Blue, and I reiterate what I've said to you before, you REALLY need to get paid for these. They are quite good. Troubling and dark, many times, but that is the bane of many writers. Yet always masterfully done.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Whoa.. Another exemplary review from you, Eddie. Thank you for setting my writings on the pedestal. You always know how to lift up my spirits. :)

[annabellee]

wow this is excellent, sad but very good. And yeah I could totally picture Avril singing this :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Annabellee. :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)