On Top of the Twins

9/11.

At the edge of time, I behold the moment.

From marginal distance away from life

Sanely I do my insane act

I portray my life on this death note

Oh family, oh friends where do you lie?!

Illusive my thought, what is this life?

Humanity dug its own cemetery   

And the twins die with same fright.

      

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

potent poetic commanding attention with its intensity and crafting~

[Randolf Ramos]

Truly, the fast pace world outpace our very existence that we are diverted to a meaningful life. Just by seeking solace we find meaning in every little thing distorted by the modern times and technology. And choosing to be alone and different is not insane as people may look upon us with scornful stare. it is judgement without comprehension to consider us that way.

It is just making the most of our time.

Great write
Got to learn a lot from you
Keep on writing.

[creativekat]

very dark me like!

[Poetic Beauty]

the last two line speak loud and clear. This poem is done quite well and tied up at the end.

[Young Mountain]

I'm in the same boat, those last two lines were heavy - you can feel hope die with those lines. Your word play is always fantastic.

Thanks for sharing

[Brad]

those last two, man...those spoke loudly to my ears....echo in my brain, bravo, my new friend

[Ecnelis]

Nice! Each line or two lines could easily become its own poem.

The last four lines are my favorite.