Four Horsemen

The end is just a new way towards a beginning with an end

You take and you take
And it makes and it makes
It looks bleak, it looks bleak
Then we reek, then we reek

Is it worth what you've reaped?

Author's Note

It's a short one but you can still tell me what you think

Reviews

[Ken e Bujold]

Richard, I like the opening line. After that, I am uncertain as to what you are trying for, especially in light of the title. I also have trouble with the repetition of the 3rd and 4th lines, as they scan as simply being there for sake of completing a visual pattern. The poem has the kernel of an intriguing statement but doesn't quite deliver on its promise. Don't get me wrong, I think there is something here, just needs a little tweaking. Hope to read more of your work soon

Ken e