Sin

Completely random and probably very bad

As the darkness seeps in
the strongest light shines through
a happiness that was so thin
surrounded by an evil so stout
A voice breaks through
and a hand reaches my way
It serenades me so swiftly
but hides great hate
I try to instantly escape
but my body only falls
so the people slowly reach out
to drag the soul away
while carrying a being of doubt

Reviews

[Azriel]

enjoyed this a lot for several reasons, firstly i think i can relate to this feeling a lot. secondly i love the imagery and description used, loved the story-telling element that was present as well.
also these lines really speak to me:

"so the people slowly reach out
to drag the soul away
while carrying a being of doubt'"

and its far from bad, even though it's simple and short it tells volumes, i look forward to more of your pieces.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Austin,

Darkly Relevant
Well done

Always,

Matthew
A.

[Lee]

What an eerie, dark and yet lovely poem.
Great diction, strong vivid imagery and real true depth behind your words

"A voice breaks through and a hand reaches my way It serenades me so swiftly but hides great hate..." Great line. Nice work

[~a.wall~]

Thank you :) It wasn't expected to be this good just random