The Way I Feel

The way I felt about a girl, but I was a wee bit reluctant to tell her.

We were upside down and spinning around

I was searching for myself in the lost and found

When suddenly I saw it

The world stopped turning for a minute

It was something I hadn't seen before

I'm overly euphoric to find something I wasn't looking for

Because there's something in seeing you smile

That makes my day feel worthwhile

I just want to bask in your perfection

So I throw myself in your direction

Schizophrenic voices fill my head

They enunciate the words I wish I said

Every night, I decide

To tell you how I feel inside

But I am cursed with a silent tendency

And I can't pronounce the word beauty

Right before I start to speak

The words begin to cease to leak

I want to tell you how I feel

But I've got to be sure that it's real

So I'm left standing there

Wondering if you could care

I look into your eyes in a futile attempt to realize

If it could possibly be true

The way I feel about you

Blinded by shades of grey

I don't know what to say

A sensation of mediocrity

Comes down and strangles me

I don't know what to do

All I've got is this need to be near you

 

Author's Note

Opinions? Comments? Much appreciated.

Reviews

[Judy Ponceby]

I like it. It moves quickly, probably like your thoughts, causing one to be nervous. I think it flows pretty well until the one unrhymed line, but that may be intentional given the subject and the feeling you are trying to get. Very nicely done :)

[J.Carnevale]

Its lovey. wonderful job

[Emily]

Nice flow. It's very real.I fumbled a bit on the line 'The words begin to cease to leak',but otherwise really good!

[Nimbus Thread]

Well expressed, from truthful apprehension to the wonder of attraction.
"The words begin to cease to leak," a fresh way of conveying a stammering moment. I enjoyed this.

[Kate]

You're writing is so beautiful!

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

A very good flowing structure
I enjoyed it quite a lot

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

We can be blinded by our feelings, afraid to share them. Good write.