Hold Me Together. Please...

Do what you want to me,

I enjoy it.

Say things that will later on, make me cry,

I crave it.

Kiss me only when drink blends with your blood.

The taste excites me.

Use me until I can no longer breathe.

Addicted.

Take in all of me; Hold me together....for just a second.

This.

Then crush me in your hands, knowing...

I'll always come back for more.

I need it. 

Reviews

[Jamie]

Passionate. I could feel.the hunger in the very depths of my soul. Very enticing. Loved it. You should read 'Mocking My Pain'. I wrote it. I think you would like it. Jolly good work of art you've got here. With love. »Jamie💜

[Arsh]

very passionate write.. full of addiction to lust.
... been a pleasure to read your words. Your melodic words themselves touch the heart of your lovers... foresure.

Ps. Loved the mixture of emotional feelings either that you've well plotted here!

[ayejodie]

Aw Thank you so much for the review! glad that you enjoyed the poem :)

[Arsh]

Pleasure to kiss your hand.
Romance's been all time pleasurable in the world.. for no reason even.. the reason of this world's all 'love'. So, whenever, I read such fired-up pieces written with gratified heart.. find some kinda value, the unrecognized feeling of ecstasy .. don't know why.. but, may be, cause.. it's all one needs to breathe along air. Right?

[ayejodie]

true, All one needs to breathe, alongside air...and yet the very thing that can cause so much pain. how much we run after something that has the power to do so much damage to us.

[Bhumika Devkota]

Very strong and powerful poem, the form and the structure is great.

[ayejodie]

thanks very much for the review, glad you enjoyed it!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Wow very strong words! I really like it.
I Think it has great potential!
(Please read my story called, The Blonde Girl. I think you would like it a lot.)
Keep up the great work!

C. Lee Battaglia

[ayejodie]

Thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate it! I'll have a look now thanks! 😊

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Thank you! Your welcome!
Please leave me a review of what you think.

[Rea Sky]

Ooooh. I think the person talking is a real masochist? Poems talking about strong emotions like these are very interesting. The presentation of masochism in this poem (If I am right), is natural and real. intense and free! Awesome work!

[ayejodie]

You are quite right! The person in the poem causes their own pain purposely, knowing it will lead to one brief moment that they have become addicted to. The moment of being held. Because the character feels they are being physically held together. So he/she will endure all of this pain and put themselves through repetitive heartbreak all for this one moment. If that makes sense? Haha :) thank you for your review, I hope you enjoyed the poem :)

[Cool Girl]

I really love the way you wrote this. Even the structure of the poem makes it more emotional. Great job!

[ayejodie]

Thanks so much for the review, I really appreciate it! Glad you liked it :)

[Cool Girl]

You are so very welcome:)