Succumbing to my pains...

I stand here in my room,

with darkness all around...

The walls painted with my blood,

and nail marks on the ground.

Listen to this silence,

and you shall hear my screams...

The resultant of your tortures,

are these sorrowful dreams.

My eyes they feel so numb,

with tears that I shed...

And now I just lay here,

wishing I were dead!

I am tired of your ramblings,

your arrogant, stubborn self...

I might succumb to these pains,

into silence I shall delve...

Reviews

[B. Maaitah]

I love this one... amazing flow of rhyme... powerful impact, and gives way to multiple interpretations, and that I like

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Listen to this silence,
and you shall hear my screams." - This was hauntingly beautiful.
I really hope, that you are feeling better now after writing this poem and after the passage of time. This was beautifully sad. Loved it!

[Fabric Pulse]

Informative to questions. Quizzical with structure. You're angry, it's telling, but the victimizer is left masked and all you're left with in this rhyme is sort of confronting yourself, at least that's what I got out of it.

[Alana Michele]

from what i understand.. there are two people, and the one in the last stanza is the cause of the pain in stanza 2? good read

[poetic soul]

lovely poem....but i kinda dont like it...if u talking about yourself here...not really the kinda "you" i know would pen down something like this!!!
but for the art value, this is an awesome piece!!!

[Natasha Leanne]

Dark and beautiful :) Well done

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Definitely a moving piece of work. Succinct and telling - I especially like the line about the nails on the ground...very powerful!
Light,
Siddartha

[Brianna Brie]

Yet, another poem full of emotion. Nicely written!

[Vaishali..^_^]

Ah..!! beautifully sad..!I can relate to this...! and there were many incidents in my life too..when i felt like..why the hell i am alive...but then life is this way/.. and we have to live it the way it comes..!
thanks for sharing...!!

Vaishali^_^