Feeble Mind

Sometimes our mind can be the hardest prison to escape from

Locked deep inside

This feeble mind of mine

Unable to let go

Yet too proud to show

The scars of the past

The whole world laughed

A day shall come

Where my heart will hum

The tune of angels

Ours a story for the fables

Tonight I sit in sorrow

The sun rises only to bring

An even darker tommorrow

Reviews

[Harrisen Viator]

I know the feeling, too well. You do a wonderful job of showing how sometimes thinking just brings you down. And how our minds are the cause for constant sad thoughts. The last stanza shows how you hope for that day that you will feel happy, but you still feel sad and have nothing to look forward to the next day. I can empathize with you, here. It's such a difficult thing to do, to get off of the sad thoughts and start thinking more positively. Great job, and you do a very good job of conveying your emotions in such a short poem.

[Sami Khalil]

A great look on the power and weaknesses of our minds and how they can turn into a prison if we are not free thinkers.
Well done.