Eternal Love

I was just messing today and came up with this one.

Eternal Love

 

Tangled up in thoughts of you

My mind conceived a brilliant hue

So full of promise that my heart did soar

Over the seven seas and over mountains more.

 

What can contain my love for you?

No prison door or keyless lock nor even chosen few.

Though death shall come like a slow train seen from afar

Forever my passion will burn for you as the brightest star.

 

Steve

Jan. 13, 2009

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think.. be honest please.

Reviews

[Aspiring Angel]

Hello my friend,

I am sorry that I have not been to visit your wonderful words. I know this time of year has to be a rought time for you but remember All Work And No Play makes Steve a dull boy. ROTFL Hope you will find the time to write again soon. Myself, I hope I find the words to write again soon. Drives me crazy this writers block that I cannot seem to shake. Hmmmmmmm think more coffee might help? LOL

Take care of you. Talk soon.

Hugs,
Lesa

[Ladysue]

It is very lovely; beautifully expressed and heartfelt. It flowed well and spoke to my heart. Loved the last line and the entire piece too. Wonderful!!!

[jen]

it is lovely ... it just needs more.... your flow is gorgeous but it makes the reader greedy for more... at least this reader :)

[Melon Choly]

Oh Steve, it makes my heart melt, it's so simply beautiful!

You have a way with the flow of your words, it seems to come so easily for you.

This is perfect, like a romantic Valentine's Day card to your sweetheart.