Long ago

It was long ago, but it's all coming back

I had pushed it to the back of my mind

So why did i have to find it now

 

When they touched me like they did

When they hit me, when they threatened me

It's all coming, hour by hour, day by day

It's all coming back

 

It was a long time ago, yet i can't stop dreaming

Waking up screaming

It comes in my sleep

Night after night

It comes in my room when i'm all alone

It comes into school through the look in those around

It's all coming back

Back to me

 

When it comes

I can't move

When it comes

I can't talk

When it comes

I can't be strong

Coz i know

It's all my fault

Reviews

[Bailey C. Writing]

Coz i know
*Cause I know.

This was a really good write though. Your use of repetition worked quite well here, and it really spoke to me because sometimes I feel the same way. You've put a message across in a very nice poetic way. Good write, good job

[-Scribe in Style-]

Almost spot on!

When it comes
I can't move
When it comes
I can't talk
When it comes
I can't be strong
Coz i know
It's all my fault

The burden of a fault. The burden of someone lost or the harsh guilt of not being good enough.... To see others in pain or hurting, to see the consequences that unfold..
It really spoke to me.
Thanks for sharing
A

WOW. Don't stop the story because we're all listening now :)

[Brytt]

Coz: 'cause

Also, I think I just died a little. Such a sad, beautiful story...

[TJ]

wow the end just threw me for a serious loop!

awesome write

[joshua deathdealer]

Nicely done!!

[DontBlink158]

Great write fill with emotion and power. Great job!!

[Helpless]

very strong write! though filled with confusion from the author. nicely done!