The Lashing Post: Her Point Of View

I wrote this for a contest

I'm way up here & you're way down there.

All the horrid thoughts of that night rush to my head as I watch you rot.

I'm so happy that you didn't back down & deny our love

But part of me wishes you would have.

Oh My dear Tony Jay White

How I miss you.

I wish we could have lived on together

But society set it's death grip on us.

Even though I rose to heaven I still watched you,

As they beat you & left you for dead.

The moon light every night still haunts my mind with those memories.

I want to come down & undo your cuffs so we can be together once again

but I can't leave here,

I've tried to rescue you.

I've tried to heal you,

I've tried to hold you,

I've tried to kiss you

But all I can do is watch you in pain

As you suffer on earth for another one hundered & fifty years

While I'm in heaven wishing I could steal your pain away.

Author's Note

Ok I wrote this for a contest!

Reviews

[ANNA]

Where do you come up with your ideas! Your a very good wroter hun...I can see that you are going to write some amazing poems in the future! I can wait to read those!! Awesome write.

Much love n respect,
anna

[Kitty]

Very interesting write! I liked the idea of the poem. Sitting in Heaven watching as the cruel Earthlings steal your loved one's joy.

Great job!

Josie

[Lyndsay Castro]

This is really intense, and my entire world revolves around intensity. Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it and I like the form you have here. Plus: killer subject.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A very dark and intense write... sometimes love is torn apart by outside interference of loved ones who think they know better but do more damage then good.

[An owl on the moon]

Brilliant imagery of darkness and pain, filled with a cry for some mercy, some hope... Your vivid words bring about such an amazing story of injustice. Well done!

Craig

[Michael X]

I really enjoyed reading this poem, the vision itself is very well written, creates two events in motion,
the earthly and the heavenly, in that aspect alone, the creativity grabs hold of the readers imagination.

I was drawn to the sentence "As you suffer on earth for another one hundered & fifty years"
as it opens the meaning, and creates an unseen occurrence happening in the background, as well as

mystery, the affection is expressed with convincing feature, a desire to heal, rescue, hold and kiss,
you bring many details to punctuate the feeling of longing in love, is a love that will never die.
You did an excellent job on this writing, Good luck with the contest!
Take Care, Mike