Under The Moon

I'm not sure what or who this is about but ya gotta love the random ones ha?!!

I lay in this grass

to stare at the night sky.

The moon is high & full

& there's no lurking memories of your goodbyes.

 

Have I forgotten that retched day?

The day you left me to make it on my own?

Or am I just numb

to the pain you left behind,

 

I want to be alone now

but at the same time I need to be held.

 

I feel as if I'm invisible

to everyone passing me by.

I'm nothing now to everyone,

Just a mere forgotten soul

in the blur of everyone's disease.

 

I only want another

to dance with me under the moon.

So here I lay

hoping he'll find me soon.

Author's Note

Nothing's perfect,Don't be too harsh please!!

Reviews

[kitty_kelley]

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[Rain Bo]

I really liked this.

I was kind of surprised, actually. Honestly, I didn't expect to like it.

[An owl on the moon]

I love the beauty and softness of this piece... the dreamlike quality of waiting in the moon's subtle light for love and tenderness... Wonderful!

Craig

[Sarah]

Aw, this is really cute - I especially loved the rhyme in the final stanza. Very pretty. (: One typo I noticed, though: "The day you left me to make it on me own?" Should be MY own. No big deal though & it didn't distract me from the poem.^^ Great job! =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When we break up with someone we can certainly feel like the world is passing us by and we can't get back in the game...

I feel as if I'm invisible
to everyone passing me by.
I'm nothing now to everyone,
Just a mere forgotten soul
in the blur of everyone's disease

I really love this stanza as I know that feeling as you know feel like no one cares cause life goes on for them while you are stuck in misery.