sun-kissed the moon

I whisper a few songs

Knowing you will hear

Because every stardust here

will carry my sound waves to your ears

I write a few poems

Knowing you will feel

Because every word I wrote

Will be yours to steal

That's the problem with non-believers

They always look for a power to hold

A card, the universe, or a few horoscope

But I'm cheating the moment anymore

I've forgotten the disadvantages of heaven

I have no expectations here

I have no hope

Because everything is the best it can be

Or I forgot to have dreams

If I could change one thing

I would change the moment I was born

To be closer to you on my chart

And I would like to be the flower of your moon

But I am the sun,

and you say you gather my shine

And you want me to pray under your light

To manifest you

I am aware that the sun is one of the stars

but cannot show the endless explosions inside

the moon is lit by her scars

and there are only few mornings they appear together in the sky

Just because the novices on land cannot see them at all times 

does not mean they are not together

Even if the Earth comes between them during a lunar eclipse

They always orbit their worlds for each other.

Reviews

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You are a very romantic writer, Beren! And this is a most beautiful exploration of love and soul connection. The idea that stardust can carry sound waves is a very poetic and imaginative way to describe love. There’s a sense of vulnerability and openness throughout, and an acceptance that there are things in love that we cannot control or change. This is admirably expressed in the non-believer’s tendency to look for signs in the universe or horoscope, and then this moves to the imagery of the sun and moon to set up a very satisfying closing line, “Even if the Earth comes between them during a lunar eclipse / They always orbit their worlds for each other.”

[Beren]

Sorry for the late reply!
Aww. Thank you so so much. This is such a nice comment. I am so glad to hear that you liked this one! You see beyond the words. Hope all is well.

[A.H.]

what a lovely poem! This is beautiful piece of writing. where were you hiding these words and lines? The opening two stanzas set the tone for a romantic, soulful poem. But the last two stanzas, great expressions! Can't say more, how much I loved reading this one. Thanks for writing and sharing this wonderful piece, B.
"I am aware that the sun is one of the stars
but cannot show the endless explosions inside
the moon is lit by her scars
and there are only few mornings they appear together in the sky

Just because the novices on land cannot see them at all times
does not mean they are not together
Even if the Earth comes between them during a lunar eclipse
They always orbit their worlds for each other."

[Beren]

Ahh! Sorry for the late reply my friend! Thank you so much for your beautiful comment! You truly made me so happy. I don't even know how to thank! Hope you are doing okay! I missed your poems!

[A.H.]

I'm glad to hear you, and read you. Always! I'm doing good, hope you're too. take care!

[Lillian Burrows]

The words you use are absolutely beautiful and it all flows brilliantly. The imagery and feelings within this are so lovely. Your experience and passion really shines through, especially with this line-

'the moon is lit by her scars' - it had my heart BEATING! It was such a pretty and powerful way to personify the moon.

Keep on writing!

[Beren]

So sorry for the late reply! OMG, you are so sweet! Thank you so much for your beautiful words! Hope all is well with you!

[Soren]

A lovely poem of fit and need that reflects the union of the forces of nature and love. Beautiful in its images and metaphor. I loved it

[Beren]

Sorry for the late reply sir. Thank you so much for your very understanding and sweet comment! Hope all is well!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Funny when we think of it, this kiss would be an eclipse to all else and the awe inspiring moments that it brings🙏🏻🕊

[Beren]

Sorry for the late reply. Haha! What a brilliant comment! Thank you so much! Hope all is well.

[redd Brick Keshner]

All well as could be expected. Good to have you back at the café 🕊🙏🏻

[Beren]

Thank you so much🫶

[redd Brick Keshner]

Most welcome🕊️🙏🏻