darkest shade of blue

I lean on the wall to have something to lean on
But what if an earthquake happens and my home collapses on me?

This is the new me thinking

I get back up again
For you to tear me down better
I open my heart to show you
where to hit me right

Thank you for feeding all my sorrows
I thought they couldn't hurt more
Thank you for showing me it can always be worse

I cycle through every shade of blue
I camped on the dark side of the moon
I don't think I can settle somewhere anymore

Because you burned my ticket to you
Every time you were late
and i couldn't go home
now I cry in a vegan restaurant
with the life lessons you taught me

You taught me best to run away from me
and the
blue sky represent the hope we can't fly,
blue sea represent the freedom we drown in

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Wow, this the ultimate "you tore me down, made my heart collapse in on me" poem.
I love the line, "Because you burned my ticket to you" that is wonderful metaphor.
I like how you use the earthquake, shades of blue and the idea of "feeding all my sorrows.."
this poem really strikes a chord with me.
j.

[Beren]

Thank you so much! I appreciate your comments a lot. I'm really glad you liked this one. But still hope you are doing well and can't relate sad poems! Wishing you all the best.

[Kady R.]

Hiii Bereennn!! What a heartfelt poem here and glad you are new as you stated "this is the new me thinking." Theres something wonderful about a caterpillar into a butterfly transformation.

I loved how you stated the realism about how there this big blue sky of hope that we cant fly in and a blue see of freedom that we can down in. This poem just encompasses human fragility here so well. And yet there is a strength to it.

Thanks Beren for such a well writen poem!!🤗🤗🤗

[Beren]

Thank you so much Kady! Your comments are valuable!! Hope you are doing great right now! I can't wait to read your poem!

[Kady R.]

Welcome🤗🤗🤗

[Relic]

"I camped on the dark side of the moon." I like that line. It shows the emptiness one can feel inside when things go sideways with someone they thought was there for them.

This poem shows the doubt and regret one can go through. I see it almost like a letter never sent but now resides in the drawer of experience. I would imagine we all have a drawer like that somewhere in the back of our minds.

Good writing, Beren.

[Beren]

Wow! What a great comment! You made me read this review a few times, so good! Thank you so so much for taking time to read my poem and comment! Appreciate it a lot! Take care sir!