artificial flower

I left all my notebooks on a Greek island when I moved.
I don't want to write poetry anymore.
I don't want to heal either.
I've also given up trying to save Plath.

I have no more ashes to be a phoenix.
I have no more soil so you could be a worm and gnaw at my flesh.
I have no more words to say to sing you songs.
I have no more love..

I was a flower that would never fade in any weather,
But I sat on the edge of hell.
When the night fell for 90 days,
And you came to warm your hands in winter,
I was trying to heal the burn marks the summer left on me.

When the sun was no longer good for me.
When there was no home left for me in the Balkans.
I had to try to clear my mind with cold water.

I was digesting everything that happened.
Only truth belongs in what happened.

So, long story short,
You don't even have a single torn out leaf in my heart's garden anymore.

Reviews

[redd Brick Keshner]

The opening moved me so much and the mention of no more ashes to be a phoenix just blew me away! None of my notebooks survived and I moved around a lot. And all the places I lived at are no longer as well. One day internet poetry will also drift into digital abyss... and here I am swimming in it while I still can. Powerful read.

[Beren]

Hey!! It's so good to see you! I hope we won't lose here... Notebooks can burn, but we collect here things for forever, don't we? Thank you really much for your beautiful comment! I appreciate it!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Most welcome, Beren. And here's to not losing anything, any longer 🕊️🙏

[RomaJ]

Beren, this piece moved me deeply. It reads like a quiet reckoning -- raw, weary, and honest.

The image of the flower that "would never fade" yet sits "on the edge of hell" struck me especially -- it captures the kind of strength that comes only after surrender.

There’s so much truth in this letting go; it feels like its own kind of healing.

[Beren]

Yesss, again! You understood me great! And you have an amazing way of using the words in the poems and in the reviews! Than you really much, hope you are doing well!

[Lorry]

I have often wondered why artificial flowers are deemed vulgar and offensive to give when nothing dies and apart from the odd dust once a month, will last forever.
Maybe this is just a guys point of view but at the first sign of love something has to die.
I like your "giving up on saving Plath", which is almost blasphemy in the poetic world, but I totally get that too. How can we save anyone when saving ourselves seems impossible?

[Beren]

Oh I am so sorry for my late reply! I didn't realize the comment, I used to check all of them through the reviews part but now with the glitching that part got lost!
I really loved the way you asked questions and told me which quote you liked. Thank you so much for sharing your lovely thoughts sir!

[Lorry]

Ach,never fear. I dread to think how many reviews I missed in the great glitch! 😀

[Samuel Dickens]

Wow! This is what call a major rejection! Whether this is a person or something else, you've certainly shown them the door. I'm impressed.

[Beren]

I am glad to impress you sir! Thank you really much! Liked your words here!

[Chris Shaw]

Heavily impacted by that last killer line. That’s putting the record straight.

And you came to warm your hands in winter - fabulous

A dark poem Beren but so well crafted.

Chris

[Beren]

Wow! Thank you so much! I really love your quotes in the poems and it's an honour to hear this from you! I appreciate it so much!

[Betty Hermelee]

Everything seems artificial to you now, like a flower that would never wilt.....your words are sorrowful, depressed, anxious...trying to heal..."I have no more love" really sums up your mood.... which I think is very dark....The last line is the most telling in this mournful piece.... excellently written Beren...
Warmly, B

[Beren]

Gosh I am so sorry, I wrote a half respond and couldn't delete! Nobody told me I can't delete comments from telephone! Haha! Well I was saying, you really understood my poem, and I love your words and wide seeing through words so much! I appreciate your comment and I will visit your great poems soon! Can't wait! Thank you for your time!

[Betty Hermelee]

you are very welcome Beren
Warmly, B

[redzone]

Sylvia had her demons to fight, and isn't it ironic that it was only after her passing did she come alive. But alive she is and "saved" by all those who come to know her through her writings. But, honestly, there is a hole in the universe caused by her leaving. Yes, my friend, truth does
"belong to what happened," and sometimes that truth is hard to digest, hard to even imagine, because it is not what was wanted or needed.

I disagree, this poem is not represented by an "artificial flower", nor is the poet who wrote it. It's more like a Tulip, whose heart soil nourishes it and gives it colors. Colors that translate into poetry. Even in this poem, whose sadness proclaims it will never "heal" or "write" again, reveals a heart's garden filled with real flowers.

It's a wonderful poem, Beren and it deserves the praise the 2 poets below me gave it (Neville and Jacob). I am glad you wrote it and shared it.
-Curt

[Beren]

Hey sir!!! I appreciate your time so much! That's great! I thnk a lot about Sylvia, and her poems, I mean who doesn't... I used the artificial flower like the Betty meant at the above comments, artificial flowers can't wilt, or get destroyed but somehow it did, and I knew it was fake but I still felt down it died... Something fake died. I really loved your comment so so much! I love Neville and Jacob so much, they are great! And after those great poets I had great comments as well from beautiful other poets! I appreciate your comment and your thoughts. You always see the deep in my poems! Have a great day, I'll answer your message soon!

[Neville]

You probably won't (or can't) imagine how hard I struggled to get here .. and believe me, I can't tell you just how glad I am that I persevered .. oh' and I'm with the guy down there with the furry face .. I reckon SP would be smiling BIG .. Take care on your journey I hope I'm not too far away when you eventually arrive .. Neville

[Beren]

You know I came to UK for you🥱 haha! I appreciate Jacob too! And thank you, Plath should've been smile when she was alive.
Thank you really much for your sweet comment!

[Neville]

my absolute pleasure .. n no kidding .. 😎👍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Can't believe this incredible write has no reviews.
I think Sylvia is past saving but I think she would appreciate the thought.
j.

[Beren]

Oh my god!! What a beautiful saying! Thank you really much, I appreciate it... I can't runaway from Plath, I moved to a different country recently and they told me I reminded them Plath as a writer!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You do...I did my Masters Thesis on Plath and Sexton...I know when I see flavors of her writing.
read moreYou do...I did my Masters Thesis on Plath and Sexton...I know when I see flavors of her writing.
j.