Bring me home

Sometimes it just hurts too bad to bear,

I just want it to end,

Please just help me end it..

Just take me away,

Let me have no final words,

Just bring me up to you already please..

I don't want this pain anymore,

This unbearable pain,

I hate it..

And me..

Just bring me home already..

Please bring me home...

Author's Note

Again.. feedback :)

Reviews

[Chase]

My feedback is that this in no way reflects your profile, thank HP for that. A detrimentally depressing piece, I would say that you likely should force yourself to write something a bit more upbeat just to see if you can. Also, your tag says "suiside" its "Suicide" haha.

[Beyond Our Control]

Haha.. thanks for the review Chase! I will take into consideration writing something upbeat. That's not really me but, I will consider it. :)
- It's Beyond Our Control

[Bohrium Guy]

Depressing in one sense however its a good expression of deep feelings in writing. A release needs perhaps or maybe just penning a thought. Either way I found this to be a good write. Thanks for sharing.

~Rob~

[Justin]

that was really amazing, u were able to talk about something that many people go through like suicide, sometimes ppl have a hard time in life and think it is the end :( those are the same ppl, who have been bullied by other ppl and believe everything that they are told by them :( amazing job :)

[Beyond Our Control]

:) thanks it was writing because of one of my friends.. they attempted and almost succeeded.. they told me basically what had been going through their mind when they were attempting and I kind of wrote this based on what they said was going through their head..

[Justin]

wow that is wat makes the piece of writing even more better )

[Beyond Our Control]

yep :) it does

[Justin]

the amazing part was, u were able to write about something that is really sensitive

[Beyond Our Control]

yea it was very hard but everything that is sensitive is a hard subject for any reason..

[Justin]

yup it is, but they make the most amazing stories ever though

[Beyond Our Control]

mhm :) they do

[Justin]

yup :) if u have time, would you please check out some of my writing :) thanks :)

[Beyond Our Control]

sure :) i'd love to