EX

My mind wanders to some really fucked up places

Everyday its like a exploration

Everyday i wait for exportation

I've proved more to myself then was ever needed

I've already exceeded my expectations

Reviews

[dan]

It doesn't necessarily take a long write to make an impact with your words. This piece says so much to (potentially) so many in 5 short lines. It takes a good writer to excel at that. I guess that makes you a good writer? F****n' right it does! take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

I am pretty proud of this one. I wrote it with the intent of doing a full piece. I wrote this in like 20 seconds, sat their and re read it while i hit the bowl and was just like yea you know what, f**k it, thats good

[dan]

I often try to write as sparsely as possible, leaving a raw pounding image where a much more flamboyant one could have been used instead. Much greater impact, more bang for the buck. You've done that here and it worked extremely well. Great writing. take care...dan

[DeePayne]

For just a short poem you already captivated me :) i love it.

[BLitZeD]

thank you much, glad you enjoyed it

[Skai Rain]

Great poem of just a few words :)
The rhyming is simple and strong. I would only change "ive" to "I've"

[BLitZeD]

lol, thank you very much....and consider it done

[BLitZeD]

I've is correct?