Deceptions

When i write something and read it back 

like what the f**k did i just say

this was suposed to be a rough draft 

but na that s***s here to stay

mettaforical in difrent meanings 

split it all three ways 

dr suess got me tounge tied in the readdings

dont know what im supposed say

i try to see it quick 

and backwards that one day

hidden messages always alluding

 and eluding they shall stay 

false flag refrences 

just to make you think 

and question this

 the legitamacy ascension 

of decents dismissed 

about the legacys  i portray

the events most missed 

try and hunt me down

under my hood im a faceless terrorist  

Reviews

[dan]

Blitz, I am accepting your friend request but I wanted to review a piece of your writing first. The write is pretty good, but to be taken seriously as a writer/poet you have to pay attention to spelling, punctuation and grammar. I can't tell you what to do but if I was you I would pay more attention to those details. Good luck. take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

yea, honestly i just really suck at spelling. i auto correct "almost" everything before i post it unless its a speed write. the reason i try not to use punctuation's is because most of my writtings have story's within the main story line of the poem, so if you take say to lines one after another and read them together but out of context of the original write the meaning of that sentence will change as compared to what it originally said, and i feel like its already difficult enough with some of them to see the hidden story within... and or the chopped up phrases.... if that made any sense lol. but i definitely agree with the spelling & grammer. thank you for your review and honesty about it

p.s i am kind of disappointed you chose this one to start with, not really one of my better ones,

[BLitZeD]

na your right
i cant write
not to save my life
itd be like the Tyson Holy field fight
id cheat n hide outta sight
rip your ears n spit it out
like a beast ill feast
can you see the light now?

this is talking about the boxing fight but on the other hand it has nothing to do with boxing, that's why Holyfields name is spelled as Holy Field. same thing with a few other slightly off ways of saying a line or two in this

[BLitZeD]

p.s this was written before you reviewed me here. just thought i would throw that out there so nothings taken the wrong way. was trying to explain what i said in my first comment

[dan]

If your use, whether correct or incorrect, of punctuation is important to the structure of the poem then it's perfectly relevant for the reader to know that. Holy field instead of Holyfield if perfectly OK. I have to get to know your writing is all. As I know you better I'll be able to tell these things without asking. But my main point is this: It's obvious you have skills and talent. But if you really want to be taken seriously the devil is in the details. Clean up the spelling and grammar and you'll be golden. BTW, now that you are one of my friends please send me read requests if you want a piece read; I have way too many friends to try to keep up with my reviewing obligations; a RR will guarantee a review. Oh yeah, you gotta review some of mine too. good luck and take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

i see what you mean, i def do have to brush up on that, no question about that. i just wanted you to know some of it is done on purpose, an yea man i got you. again thanks for the review

[silent poet]

You sent me to this link in the review I left of another write.. I feel like you messing with my head, It's fun at times but sometimes It's (can't find the words).. right before u sent me here had the words ( so you will look deeper) what I see here

Is questioning and regret and things that were built but wasn't meant to be, as if it were all by mistake. a little more but I'll stop there, *rubs head*

Nice write tho, thanks for sharing.

[BLitZeD]

I wouldnt say regret, an questioning, from my angel atleast. Interestimg to see how u precieved that tho /