Look @ Me Now

Look at me now/

A crook, wonder how/

They stand and stare, so shook of me, wow/

Wont roar ill just growl/

Let um soar to the ground/

An oxymoron and proud/

An oxy w***e on my sound/

Rough night on the town/

Pour out the bars, I wish you'd get loud/

A god from the clouds/

Witnessed a lot of you now/

The potential is there, but my words keep you bound/ 

Maybe its mental, out rips the hair/

So ill try and push you, into a star if you dare/

What i say is kush dude, take a chair in my lair/

A new challenge is welcomed/ 

but a challenge is rare//

Reviews

[R Smith]

Hey that's great, me being an old guy (66' shush! not to loud) this rap style is something different but you make it really great to read, it's not an easy style to write I'd say so your work is exceptional :)

[Not here]

great one :) i heard about you from dan, and i really like the style you write in.

[BLitZeD]

thanks man, glad u liked it, n a ty to dan as well

[dan]

Blitzed, Very powerful and evocative. Your style seems to be crystalizing with each successive write, and I mean that in a totally good way. The rhyming is well played, and I especially like how you end each line with a slash, except for the last line, where you use two. A clever format to accompany the original piece of writing...and a great lion graphic also. Very well done. take care...dan

[Emily]

Very nice wording!
Keep it up!!

[Ruth]

Has a tone of conviction...nicely done...

[Emily]

A powerful and direct poem! I really like this one!

[Stars and Whales]

Yeah!!! This a great poem, I love it! Great meaning, great beat. Good job. Keep it up.

[youngkingkwan]

this is a nice little verse, I'd be interested to hear it spit as you meant it.

[BLitZeD]

me to. . . but quick would be tempo

[Rana]

Precise, enticing, mocking and really skilful.

[BLitZeD]

thank u rana

[Sultrysoul]

I like the flow very nice would make for a good battle. ;)

[BLitZeD]

:) .

[Sultrysoul]

........ :)

[BLitZeD]

;) .