Lower

I stand once more to lower this b***h

Cut um off like a mower an rip 

with a tight grip the pull string from the motor an s**t/

Leave her like a ten  dollar blower, just lips/

down her throat like my knife but that's a lot slower and slits/

your all for show, just about the glam and glitz 

you claim a life style that you wouldn't dare live/

you live in the Ritz, you couldn't even sit on the strip 

a piece on the hip, lit like a candle so you forcefully stip

gave up all your money, payment for a feigns next hit/ 

Pooh Bear with the honey, honey your what happens if Eyore and Piglet had a kid.

Reviews

[silent poet]

this here is dope!! love the scheme!

[BLitZeD]

thought youd like this one :)

[silent poet]

yes I do crazy thing is every time i thought I had a favorite here came another dope one

[Glen Weimann]

Hi Blitzed. You sent a read request for this, so I gave it a shot. It's interesting because I absolutely HATE rap and yet I found myself bouncing along to the rhythm of this. Then I read another review that also mentioned rap. I haven't the slightest idea what it's about but it seems pretty hostile and angry. And yet while I don't like it at all, at the same time I can admire the phonetics and rhythm that you've put into it.

[BLitZeD]

thank you, the way i write i think people call it rap because its not your typical poetry, the way i see myself im a storyteller poet that likes to rhyme. i mean dr seusse wasnt a rapper. haha. again thank you for taking the time to review it and im glad i could atleast get you to bob your head a little :)

[AaronFreitas]

Spitting fire! I love the last line... mic drop and walk away haha... nice work!

[BLitZeD]

haha, thanks man

[BlaqkShadow]

Wow, intense bit of freelance poetry there, passionate and direct. I can see this being part of a great rap, awesome job :D

[annalysiar]

This is strong. And unique. Symbolic in its own way so much so it could bring this poem to life. I almost wonder is it anger or passion...

[wordman]

damn ,she must have pissed you off ! great write

[Bear]

Interesting rant, strong language to give the threats more impact, then attack the lifestyle and self-image to bend the will, sounds like something Charles Manson could have written. Clap! Clap!

[dan]

Blitzed, I've said this before, you have a very unique style propelled by unique talent, where's your f****n' publisher? The way you've composed this carefully, beginning with stark, even violent, images whittled down to The House on Pooh Corner...a seemingly impossible leap but you make it work for you! I get more amazed every piece of yours I read. This is going into my library favorites, so thank you for that! take care...dan

[Insight "MH"]

You writing gives the reader fear and that's good cause I see that you always write strong poems with challenging words and you delivered the feeling to the reader.

Insight.

[BLitZeD]

fear, thats an interesting outlook on it. the whole reason i write on here is just to see what other ppls opinions are on here, and thats a new one. thanks for your insight Insight

[Insight "MH"]

It's maybe the lion affecting me ^_^