i thought i was immune ,i had wisdom i joked at myself ,but you said you loved me ,you never loved me,oh the fool i was
had a dreamy tranquil life
Sleepy happy graceful nights used to love me all my life and rejoiced
In being wonderfully alive used to love everything I did
Never for once did i regret
My walk through lanes of life was steady strides
Full of joy laughs all dreams
Serene Thoughts I had piece with me
Myself I loved and...and then I loved her... I just fell... and loved her
Yes she came full into my life
I told me love was not for me,no... no more for your bones getting old and cold
Never ready for aches and breaks and... tremulence
I had never known for I liked simply my life free and no
Worries restraints, where then she came even bad dreams
Things I never known before
You said you will fill my life to brim with joy I never known
I rejoiced for a while at everything yes,
I lived everything I saw and ready to break the peace I always known
For I loved again i cried yes,aloud i loved again, yes I broke my oath again and again... ............................
Stirred every wave in my being, I was not ready for
Is love always torment, or it's only you, the more I come to you
You come to me, shaking all grounds under my feet, why me
You say you loved me you died for me and I felt it???death only for me
So why I feel tormented... all the while
You sit by me and I dream of that lovely face but oh soul you always
Told get away for fire knows nothing but to burn and mess with your peace
I say I want to feel it one more time, even if to my demise then i go, I know
She offered me a lot but I saw nothing but wild fire coming !!!
I like to get warmth but you sound like you also... made an oath to break every part... of me
Is love really so cruel, as I never known
Oh the fool I am I told myself again and again stay away, stay away
But you will never leave me be for you said, come here, I told you, she said I loved you
Silly what more my youth I gave, I want it back
What? You do not want to die,but i am your death
To be continued...
Ibsen the dramatist once came to land of Arabia, he was enchanted at the charm he saw ,he loved a young lass, she lured me ,she danced ,he saw the beauty and was happy ,but all suddenly she came to laugh at him ,you fool she said ,you old you thought you dreamed and kept laughing, so he just gathered his clothes and walked away, from the deep snow then to the Sahara then back again to the freezing cold, he walked wisely away ,laughing,thinking i was a joke...
i just loved that dramatist IBSEN and the way he pictured how he, the wise and know it all, was fooled by a small Arab girl,it was so symbolic i could hardly catch his meaning...,she lured him ,danced for him until he was full in love and dozed and fell asleep,but she took the chance,she laughed at him and ran away,like making fun of him,from the freezing cold he came to the hot Sahara ,he found magic and found her,he was a fool ,then back to the icy cold he strolled back,laughing all the way
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A very strong piece.............packed to the brim with emotions we have all felt.........this really struck a
chord with me
Stirred every wave in my being, I was not ready for
Is love always torment, or it's only you, the more I come to you
You come to me, shaking all grounds under my feet, why me
It is how I felt a year ago........and that pain never seems to ebb, even in the happiest of moments,
and the sadness is that we lose faith............you write with tremendous feeling.
Ibsen did "A Dolls House", didn't he? The Victorian feminist piece... where Nora leaves her husband and child? That work always haunted me. This piece has a similar haunted feeling to it... wistful and pained at the same time. The last line, "You do not want to die,but i am your death" is perfect.
This is such a tragic piece of writing, a poem of promised love, lost love and hurt. Love comes, goes, stays, stays but hurts, goes away, disappears, hurts more and, there's no remedy - no quick relief or release. Your post says it all and says it almost desperately:
'Is love really so cruel, as I never known / Oh the fool I am I told myself again and again stay away, stay away'
To love, to truly love is to stay whatever the hurt. real love survives, appears out of the ashes like the Phoenix.
'had never known for I liked simply my life free and no / Worries restraints, where then she came even bad dreams /Things I never known before /You said you will fill my life to brim with joy I never known /rejoiced for a while at everything yes,'
Being free - what's that when the heart's involved?
This is so sad, i truly hope the next part shows hope. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
I can remember reading so much of your poetry, way, way back.. but always thought this post to be your very best. It still is.. it's immensely powerful yet amazingly tender. Emma
This is a beautiful piece. It really captures the emotions you're feeling. Indeed, everyone has those moments where they don't think they deserve to be loved. And love comes & takes them by surprise. But once again, love is gone. It's so hard, and I can feel it in this piece how hurt you feel. Well done. I love it.
a dramatic yes, but very beautifully sad work.
great lines and some nice imagery, despite the symplistic style.
captures true emotion, something many poets fail to accomplish.
well done!
I like the poem, blue, it is so so sad.. love always comes along .. sometimes it is wonderful sometimes it may mean heartbreak for the first time or once again, but do you not think it is better to have loved and lost than not to have loved at all? Very well done , a nice format.
I found a great deal of connection with this line. "I told me love was not for me,no... no more for your bones getting old and cold. Never ready for aches and breaks and... tremulence."
There was a deep amount of turbulant and volitile emotions in this piece. I found that if I let my mind wander just a bit in any direction I could mentally "fill in" areas and visualize the scenery to unfold the story in my mind.
The Music I like,the Carpenter,all their songs and albums,The Super Tramps,one of their songs ,reminds me of a girl who nearly broke my heart,still feel the pain ,no ,no i will not tell who
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