sink so deep you fall off the planet.

just read it.

all of my soul spread itself across the ceiling,
and crawls down the walls with broken elbows
and body, and mind? hidden from light
in spaces so dark they dissolve.
words tear themselves from me
soon we'll all be nothing but bones,
as the flesh on our bodies,
slowly but surely,
will continue to unwrap itself.
start stacking your bricks king,
and built up the hope we all lost.
make grace of hopes eternal downfall.
and sink it into the dirt deeper with the tress tentacles
oh king wrap me in what was once hope.
we'll cry until his eyes bleed.
until our eyes bleed.

Reviews

[Bullet Soul]

I think this is really good! I didn't find nearly anything wrong with it. Of course every writer has room for improvement, but you definitely did a good job with your poem. I enjoyed reading it!