blind

This is a very strong poem and It is about getting taken advantage of.

How could I be so blind to not be able to see

that what he did to me was wrong.

He handled me in uncomfortable places

and it happened over and over again.

He broke me in so many different ways

that I cannot possibly retrieve all of the pieces.

He broke me and now I have to start from scratch

to mend all the hurt and discomfort.

He is disgusting and I HATE HIM

 

 

Author's Note

I am sorry if this may be a little stronger than intended

Reviews

[Michael Guccione]

Actually, I enjoyed it but it was a little too cryptic. I mean, I understand you're trying to protect yourself but it comes across rather bland because you're so guarded.

The anger you are expressing has to be strong, so this is perfect.

Good choice on using red for key areas you wish to emphasize.

good form and well imparted message.

Keep on writing, I look forward to more of your works.

[Walter]

The bluntness of this poem makes it exceptional. Never be sorry for your words, this is a powerful poem. Okay so I am going to go now because my heart really can't read one more poem right now. But I will be back. You are so talented, love your style.

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

This is a nice piece. I commend you for writing it out and then posting it here for others to read. I hope that you have been able to heal and can start moving forward with your life.

I hate to say that I had any problems with this piece because it is a powerful and emotional piece but I do think that it could have been done a little better. You have a lot of potential and I can see where this poem could have really knocked someone off their feet. As I said though, this piece is nice as it is, I can just see a lot of potential left untouched.

Keep it up!

[Cal Vance]

this poem,so strong,so fierce and this shows alot of power.your poem speaks to me,ur a beautiful poet and a beautiful woman

[justjenn_2u]

I used to say I could never hate, but I understand how hate is possible after reading this poem. You will be a have amazing character when you are able to heal. I admire that you were able to express your emotions.

[Sandra K]

This is a well done poem!! I hope you were not in a situation like this, but this a good work!!


Thanks for sharing!!

Sandra K!

[J.P.O.et]

Great visual exclamation at the end with the red really spelling
out the true nature of this creep, wriiting it and putting it out there
makes us feel better though, non Nice write
J.P.O.et

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

The reason you did not see, was because you did not know and when you did, you acted accordingly I assume Kaitlyn....some lessons are very difficult for us to learn if we do not have the right teachers, springs to mind from this poem, which has a great strength of character in it. Well done. Do not apologise for expelling, you are a poet. LLB

[Shadows of Sight]

It so sad that there are poeple out there that would take advantage of the innocent. Your emotions do this justice. use them as a strength to get over the hard times that you have been forced to endure.
:)