Cruelest Word

This style is called Trimeric it's the first one so any citizism is greatly appreciated.

Hate is the cruelest word

Underneath my skin I can feel it

You don’t want to hear

 Shut your eyes out

 

Underneath my skin I can feel it

With my burning finger tips

Blowing the smoke in your face

 

You don’t want to hear

As you cover your ears

Pointing the finger to blame

 

Shut your eyes out

The cruelest word has you down

Living in this shame

Reviews

[Serenity Faith]

GAH! I'm so impressed right now! You did this only a matter of minutes and it's exactly the way a Trimeric poem should be! I loved it! I'm so excited now! Truly, I can't wait to see what else you try. You're still letting your emotions out, and letting your voice be heard, in a different poetic form. Very very very well done Brandon! ^_^ I'm so happeh! Ya know what would be awesome? If you made a poetry book. Each poem in a different form, with different words, but all with the same topic. I really believe you could do it, and get it published. Keep it up!

[Brandon Mathis]

I have been working on a book but isn't exactly where i want it to be yet.

[emilythestrange]

I can't wait to read what else you have for me to read! I could never write something like this. And my poem that everyone likes, The Warrior, took like four months to perfect! The last verse just wouldn't go right... But yours is fab, and I love it.

Smiles are awesome,
:D

[Erika Jones]

I love this poem. It expresses how you feel inside about the world ... something I do a lot in my poems :) Keep it up! I might try to write a poem this way. Never heard of a Trimeric poem ... @ Emiliy White. So much for me to learn!

[Brandon Mathis]

There are a bunch of diff. styles this one just appealed to me and same for pantoum try that one also it's fun!!

[Erika Jones]

.___. Okay! What's a good example of that one? xD!

[Brandon Mathis]

check out my poem called suffering angels that pantoum style

[Erika Jones]

Okay. :)

[quixotic_rose]

I feel like with a couple of different wordings and a chorus that this could be made into a song. This is beautiful, the raw emotion displayed here is touching. great work

[Lost in Wonderland]

Such a good piece with Great emotions. Lovely use of trimetic form:) well done
God bless

[Brandon Mathis]

Thank you very much!!

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem at all:)

[Derek Cummings]

I truly enjoyed your poem and it was a lesson for me, being I'm generally a novolist and rather new to poetry. I have wrote a few rhyme poems . I thought it was deep and flowed really well. Thanks for sharing.

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you very much you should check out my other ones as well

[Crimson Bayonet]

Amazing poem! :D

[Brandon Mathis]

thank you