Fall, Crawl, Stand and Walk

I stand and I fall

I crawl and I walk

Your words go with the wind, as you call

I tried to speak but you can’t hear me at all

 

The whisper in the dark

I don’t where you are

The words carry me so far

Close to no return I fall apart

 

The shining light

In the midnight sky

I lift myself so high

I can’t return I’ve been left to die

I’m not strong enough to grab my life

 

I stand and I walk

I fall and I crawl

 

I adapt to my reason

As this world changes my seasons

And I’m stuck in-between the seams

Never can I return

I’m lost and left to burn

Reviews

[Sir Joe]

The title is very good. It should have made a greater impact if the lines "I stand and I walk/ I fall and I crawl" are placed at the ending. Those lines carry a great weight. They describe how we should all treat downfalls, problems, challenges and difficulties.

If you don't mind, how about restructuring the poem like this?

Your words go with the wind as you call,
I tried to speak but you can’t hear me at all

The whisper in the dark
I don’t know where you are
The words carry me so far
Close to no return
I fall apart

The shining light
In the midnight sky
I lift myself so high

I can’t return
I’ve been left to die
I’m not strong enough
To grab my own life

I adapt to my reason
As this world changes my seasons
I’m stuck between the seams
Never can I return
I’m lost and left to burn

I stand and I walk
I fall and I crawl

[Brandon Mathis]

i prolly won't change it but thanks for the advice

[Sir Joe]

How about the line "I don't where you are"?
I think you omitted the word "know"

[Brandon Mathis]

yeah when i type it up sometimes i do that alot, lol

[BorealPoet]

Very interestingly done. This is one that is very unique and once again the clarity is there. I like how I stand and I walk, I fall and I crawl stands out in stanza 4. Good work my friend!

[Brandon Mathis]

Thank you so much i'm glad that you liked it