listen? me? no...

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

it burns, it burns

please stop hurting me

 

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

it kills. it kills

please stop hurting me

 

mummy said we mustn't touch that

        ouch

mummy.

said.

we mustn't.

touch.

that. 

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

Outstanding poem, its all about listening and learning the hard way!

[Greg Skura]

Listen to your mummy or she will become unraveled!

[YouoweYoupay]

Child abuse...yet another chapter of the devil's effect in people's scarred hearts. Horrible thing. Nicely put poem. Keep it up.

[zogzog]

or, ones idea of child abuse anyway....

[zogzog]

it almost sounds like child abuse....

[Vin]

This is odd, slightly unnerving but still very good :)
Really shows the childlike reluctance to do as mummy says, ha ha!
Great write!

-Beth

[Jeff]

Creepy. It makes me think and wonder.

[Mauricio Montoya]

This one leaves you pondering. Nice work.

[Havatara]

Wow. That's creepy and amazing. Well done.

[Solitaire-P0ette]

This poem is chilling in it's own way....the underlying meanings. It has multiple...and its left to the reader's interpretation. Who would have thought that child like words were so strong? Great write